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*Penbl* Author: Liath Hawke          [Sep 17, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Fantasy :: Action/Adventure :: Other
*Penr* Details: First 2 chapters of something I'm rewriting. While I love what I wrote, I want to know if it sounds interesting and if anything needs to be reworke.

 The Warlock and I: Book 1 Chapters 1 & 2  (18+)
Julian asks his warlock friend to turn him into something inhuman but gets a task.
#2258619 by Liath Hawke

*Penbl* Author: Mark Diaz          [Sep 13, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Melodrama :: Other :: Other
*Penr* Details: A 2 paragraph short story with a lot of emotions

 Light  (13+)
This was a getting out of a rut for me, I'm posting here as a first test.
#2195862 by Mark Diaz

*Penbl* Author: PennyInPocket          [Sep 12, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Comedy :: Nonsense :: Entertainment
*Penr* Details: Updated an old story. I hope you enjoy
  [Short Story]

 Not Your Average Cup of Coffee  (E)
A man on a journey for an exotic cup of coffee. An update of an old story
#2258364 by PennyInPocket

*Penbl* Author: Grieving_Girl          [Sep 9, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Emotional :: Teen :: Nonsense
*Penr* Details: This is just a collection of poems I wrote, most of them a while ago, but I recently remembered this exists and I want to know how I can improve my writing.

 Poems  (E)
This is where I'm going to put most of the poems I write. Most recent update: 9/15/21
#2201289 by Grieving_Girl

*Penbl* Author: Mark Diaz          [Sep 5, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Romance/Love :: None :: None
*Penr* Details: A poem I wrote in quarantine

 Before Quarantine  (E)
A poem about Fire Hair Girl
#2256247 by Mark Diaz

*Penbl* Author: Dee          [Sep 2, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Mystery :: History :: Family
*Penr* Details: I'm looking for feedback on this newly revised/reworked short story. It has a completely different ending from previous drafts.
  [Short Story]

A Woman of Honor  (E)
Obsessed with her family's history, Liz discovers a book that tells an amazing story.
#2256815 by Dee

*Penbl* Author: Joto-Kai          [Aug 31, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Fantasy :: Romance/Love :: Occult
*Penr* Details: Love binds Elisha's spirit to the earth. As the weight of haunting gathers, can the studious Voltaire hold back his tears long enough to persuade her to save herself?


 Haunted Requiem  (13+)
I cannot be the unfinished business that ties her spirit to the earth. But how can I not?
#2256630 by Joto-Kai

*Penbl* Author: Melody Cadence Clark          [Aug 31, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Emotional :: Romance/Love :: Relationship
*Penr* Details: Would love feedback, opinions, thoughts and feelings on this poem I wrote today about someone I've never really stopped loving

Your Voice  (ASR)
A poem about love that has passed
#2257510 by Melody Cadence Clark

*Penbl* Author: Perhaps          [Aug 22, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Relationship :: Psychology :: Philosophy
*Penr* Details: :)

 Shaman's Trance  (E)
What if you are not alone in your meditation?
#1942416 by Perhaps

*Penbl* Author: Perhaps          [Aug 22, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Community :: Cultural :: History
*Penr* Details: Worth the read")

 Serpent lies...  (E)
How do you begin to explain something so reality shattering?
#2110735 by Perhaps

*Penbl* Author: PureSciFi          [Aug 18, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Sci-fi :: Mystery :: Drama
*Penr* Details: Nathum may be in the leader of the community below. But Patrinna is in control of that Research and Observation site. If anything goes wrong there, it’s her fault. And something big has happened there.

 Eight Months of Something?  (18+)
It’s usually very boring there. But that may just change for the next eight months.
#2256768 by PureSciFi

*Penbl* Author: Nine          [Aug 16, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Friendship :: Writing :: Friendship
*Penr* Details: Please help me improve with your honest reviews and suggestions

 Stranger-Friend  (E)
Poetry about a stranger who has become a friend and ended up being a stranger
#2256632 by Nine

*Penbl* Author: Temujin          [Aug 14, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Cultural :: War :: Other
*Penr* Details: Flash Fiction. Is it any good?

 RIVALRY  (13+)
Nothing to lose your head over.
#2255089 by Temujin

*Penbl* Author: Nine          [Aug 14, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Writing.Com :: Writing :: Other
*Penr* Details: Tried something new. Please help me with your reviews and suggestions.

 This too shall pass...!!!!  (E)
There is always a good after bad. Just like an echo, another day comes your way.
#2251137 by Nine

*Penbl* Author: Zachary Wright          [Aug 8, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Fantasy :: Action/Adventure :: Supernatural
*Penr* Details: This is a version of the first chapter of the book I've been trying to write and possibly publish. Any and all reviews are welcome. Don't be afraid to be critical because I want this book to do well once I can finally publish it.

 A New Dawn Ch.1  (13+)
Twins with supernatural abilities try to figure out where they came from.
#2237614 by Zachary Wright

*Penbl* Author: PrudhviRaj12          [Aug 6, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Thriller/Suspense :: Detective :: Mystery
*Penr* Details: Looking for some honest feedback about writing style and story originality. Thanks!

 When do you move on?  (13+)
The story that explores a relationship between a ritualistic serial criminal and a cop.
#2250206 by PrudhviRaj12

*Penbl* Author: Shaye          [Aug 6, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Fantasy :: Young Adult :: Action/Adventure
*Penr* Details: The first chapter of a YA Fantasy novel I'd appreciate feedback on!

The Opening Eye  (13+)
A walker stumbles upon a hidden world
#2256006 by Shaye

*Penbl* Author: shyguy42          [Aug 5, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Experience :: Writing :: Teen
*Penr* Details: Hi. Would like some feeback on this piece Thank you

 A daydreamers journey to writing  (13+)
A day dreamer ponders a question. Looking back at how he started writing to answer it
#2253703 by shyguy42

*Penbl* Author: Bruce.          [Aug 1, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Biographical :: History :: Other
*Penr* Details: Do you know this town or perhaps one similar?

 Northwich, Cheshire.  (18+)
Times change.
#2032344 by Bruce.

*Penbl* Author: S.z.kamoonpuri          [Jul 29, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Food/Cooking :: Health :: Other
*Penr* Details: Plz leave even a short comment of your thoughts on it.


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#2255516 by Not Available.

*Penbl* Author: Daisan          [Jul 27, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Crime/Gangster :: Other :: Other
*Penr* Details: Requesting review of a piece I intend on expanding. Trying to improve my skill at developing characters via dialogue. Any/all constructive criticism/observations are appreciated.

 Job Placement  (18+)
A new employee to a local criminals workforce causes tensions.
#2255031 by Daisan

*Penbl* Author: Emerick Arthur          [Jul 27, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Romance/Love :: Tribute :: Relationship
*Penr* Details: It's a poetry work, my first one though. About a guy and his love

 Heartfelt Appreciation to Anon  (18+)
A lovely fear a young guy has for losing his LOVE. Waiting for your correction guys.
#2255376 by Emerick Arthur

*Penbl* Author: Charlie Carrol          [Jul 17, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Emotional :: Romance/Love :: Personal
*Penr* Details: A monologue/stream of consciousness style poem - any feedback is appreciated and rewarded!

 walls  (13+)
stream of consciousness for when you know it's all over
#2254869 by Charlie Carrol

*Penbl* Author: elizjohn          [Jul 14, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Romance/Love :: Emotional :: Other
*Penr* Details: Hello! Just looking for some fedback. Not even sure if this even reads like a true poem, but it was something I needed to write. Will review an item of yours of similar length and/or genre (poetry). Thank you in advance!

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#2254664 by Not Available.

*Penbl* Author: Jray          [Jul 13, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Fantasy :: Mythology :: Action/Adventure
*Penr* Details: This is the first chapter of my very first book. Any feedback is greatly appreciated! I want to hear from people on what I should do to better my writing. One day I would love to have this book published.

 Rhyghts Chp.1  (13+)
Chapter 1 with revisions
#2253882 by Jray

*Penbl* Author: shyguy42          [Jul 9, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Adult :: Men's :: Other
*Penr* Details: Hi, any feedback on this short story would be appreciated. Thank you in advance.
  [Short Story]

 The Man and the Voice  (18+)
A story about a ASMR fan
#2254212 by shyguy42

*Penbl* Author: Liz          [Jun 28, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Romance/Love :: Drama :: Other
*Penr* Details: Chapters 5-7 same novel last post. Thanks again. I really appreciate it so much more than you think.

Our little secret C 5-8
#2253512 by Liz

*Penbl* Author: Liz          [Jun 28, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Romance/Love :: Drama :: Other
*Penr* Details: It's my first novel ever. I've spent time trying to understand how not to suck at writing. Now that I have written about 20% of my novel and I still don't know if it is any good. All I ask for is the most hurtful review to help me out write better.

Our little secret C 1-4
#2253511 by Liz

*Penbl* Author: THoulihan          [Jun 25, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Biographical :: Experience :: Emotional
*Penr* Details: I would like reviews of any kind. Thinking of writing an autobiography or maybe a fictitious retelling of real experiences, so all feedback is appreciated.

 Throwing Darts at a Map  (13+)
Coming of age story that sprung forth from insecurity, defeat, and cynicism. Brief.
#2253280 by THoulihan

*Penbl* Author: PureSciFiPlus          [Jun 16, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Romance/Love :: Medical :: Drama
*Penr* Details: I have already done a Grammarly check with this Short Story. But it doesn’t always catch something that I have done wrong with it. Especially, when it comes to tenses. That’s where you come in.
  [Short Story]

 The First Summer of My New Life  (18+)
After over two years in a coma, Tina came out of it. It was a Summer she won’t forget.
#2252554 by PureSciFiPlus

*Penbl* Author: Joto-Kai          [Jun 15, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Fantasy :: Other :: Other
*Penr* Details: An unwanted man finds an enchanted sword standing in the cobblestones. How will his life change--for better or worse?
  [Short Story]

 A Medal for Sven  (13+)
When a little girl teaches Sven three magical words--how many are saved?
#2252502 by Joto-Kai

*Penbl* Author: Joesmoe          [Jun 10, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Dark :: Supernatural :: Psychology
*Penr* Details: This short story was made during the summer of 2020, when I was stuck in a farmhouse due to the pandemic. It touches on a certain mental disorder I have some experience with (bonus points if you can guess which one).
  [Short Story]

 The Will of the One Who You Can not See  (E)
You know they’re there, right? Alternate title, The One Near the Willow
#2217951 by Joesmoe

*Penbl* Author: Barex Aster          [Jun 1, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Fantasy :: Sci-fi :: Other
*Penr* Details: Any comments and/or ratings would be much appreciated. I’ve been mostly away from writing for some time, but I really want to jump back in, so let me know what you think! Thanks in advance.

 Icon  (13+)
“Do you really think it’s that simple?” The dragon said.
#2250996 by Barex Aster

*Penbl* Author: S.z.kamoonpuri          [May 22, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Animal :: Environment :: Nature
*Penr* Details: 2250839

Plz leave your thoughts, thanks,

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#2250839 by Not Available.

*Penbl* Author: PureSciFi          [May 19, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Sci-fi :: Drama :: Other
*Penr* Details: What I need most of all in this review is whether I used my Past Tense correctly. I tried to be like everyone else and use Past Tense. And except for the dialogue, I think that I have with this story. But I may be wrong about that.
  [Short Story]

 You Were Only a Human  (18+)
Shya may only be in control of the other humans there. But she wants more than that.
#2250735 by PureSciFi

*Penbl* Author: Kirby Ray          [May 16, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Horror/Scary :: Dark :: Death
*Penr* Details: This is a little short story I've been working on over the last few weeks. It's my first attempt at horror, and I'd love to get your feedback! Is it scary? Does it need a little punch? Let me know!

Medusa  (13+)
A convicted criminal is stalked by a monster he helped to create...
#2250569 by Kirby Ray

*Penbl* Author: willy          [May 16, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Experience :: Family :: Other
*Penr* Details: A simple little verse that we can all relate to

 Yesterday  (13+)
A bad day gets worse
#2250563 by willy

*Penbl* Author: mix n match          [May 14, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Health :: Adult :: Emotional
*Penr* Details: Would be grateful for feedback on this important issue as it has seriously impacted my own family and in this day and age I'me sure many of you or those you know.

 Bipolar and me  (13+)
Depression& anxiety etc. are dreadful afflictions, especially schizophrenia & bipolar.....
#2250414 by mix n match

*Penbl* Author: Gndrat          [May 14, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Sci-fi :: Fantasy :: None
*Penr* Details: Chapter 2 of the story. Your thoughts on in are appreciated.

 Endings and Beginnings Ch 2  (18+)
The end of the world is coming, What are they going to do about it?
#2250179 by Gndrat

*Penbl* Author: freespirit          [May 14, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Satire :: Comedy :: None
*Penr* Details: I have written this as an entry for a contest on writing.com but besides the result of the contest, I would also like to request a review to see how my words are received as this is the first time I am writing satire. TIA

 Common Sense Shortage  (E)
The one sense which we must have, but do we have it?
#2250391 by freespirit

*Penbl* Author: Daisan          [May 13, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Crime/Gangster :: Thriller/Suspense :: Other
*Penr* Details: Would like honest input on improving my description of action, in particular character movement Any input/insights you can provide to make it better would be appreciated. Want to ensure I've got the tone correct.

What It Look Like  (18+)
The realities of a life of crime is revealed to someone
#2248858 by Daisan

*Penbl* Author: freespirit          [May 12, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Women's :: None :: None
*Penr* Details: Please review this short poem that I have written to describe the beauty of a woman.

 I am a woman  (E)
What makes a woman?
#2250265 by freespirit

*Penbl* Author: J.M. Arlen          [May 12, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Fantasy :: Action/Adventure :: Other
*Penr* Details: What do you think? is it good enough?

 The Crystal Keepers.  (13+)
When a King threatens the last Torch Wings, Manie sacrifices everything to save them.
#2167420 by J.M. Arlen

*Penbl* Author: SeektheSnark          [May 11, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Sci-fi :: Technology :: Scientific
*Penr* Details: A Short Sci-Fi story about AI, any feedback welcome!
  [Short Story]

 Peaceful Handover  (E)
A vision of the near future (or past) where one man decides who controls the world.
#2249968 by SeektheSnark

*Penbl* Author: Gndrat          [May 10, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Sci-fi :: Fantasy :: Other
*Penr* Details: Chapter One of my first attempt to write a novel. Hope to hear opinions and advice. This story is completed already, just seeing if it is polished enough or do I need to buy more wax.

 Endings and Beginnings Ch 1  (18+)
What happens when the government knows that time is short? What if there is an option?
#2250080 by Gndrat

*Penbl* Author: A Cassandra.          [May 8, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Dark :: Nature :: Contest Entry
*Penr* Details: I was feeling a bit bleak when I wrote this for a comp that no one else bothered with. with nothing to compare it to, I don't know, it might be a decent poem from me

  extinction  (E)
The human gene puddle is way too shallow,
#2249998 by A Cassandra.

*Penbl* Author: Christianna          [Apr 29, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Crime/Gangster :: Drama :: Other
*Penr* Details: This is an updated version of the second chapter of my book. Looking for all feedback to improve the story and prepare the entire work for publishing.

 The Bank Heist Heroine Chapter 2  (13+)
Second chapter of the book I have written
#2249411 by Christianna

*Penbl* Author: Christianna          [Apr 29, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Crime/Gangster :: Drama :: Other
*Penr* Details: This is an updated version of the first chapter of the book I've been trying to edit and possibly publish. Any and all reviews are welcome. Don't be afraid to be critical because I want this book to do well once I can finally publish it.

 The Bank Heist Heroine Chapter 1  (13+)
First chapter of the book I have written.
#2249410 by Christianna

*Penbl* Author: A Cassandra.          [Apr 27, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Medical :: Health :: Environment
*Penr* Details: I want people to have a read of this in the hope that some of these ideas might get passed along

 camp covid  (E)
2247815 2244186 reworked
#2248903 by A Cassandra.

*Penbl* Author: Chris Breva AKA Marvin Schrebe          [Apr 27, 2021]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Business :: How-To/Advice :: Military
*Penr* Details: I am thinking of starting a long-term residential rehabilitation and treatment program for veterans called Rehab for Vets. Check out this page and give me some feed back. I am doing research!

Rehab for Vets  (E)
Seeking input
#2249240 by Chris Breva AKA Marvin Schrebe

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