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 Genre(s):  Cultural • Religious • History
 Type:  Poetry
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Hi!

I’ve written a poem, the first in many years. Any thoughts welcome!

Thanks! 😊

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Church Crawlin’  (E) A poem about my interest in visiting ancient churches #2339582 by Christopher Roy Denton

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Mythology • Scientific
 Type:  Poetry
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Hello, I wrote this piece, called "Merge." I'd like to know what more serious writers think of it.

I realize the rhymes are a bit weak. but comments about how i could make better schemes from the style I use would help me tremendously.

Merge  (E) This piece is about a different side of nature some humans interact with. #2339518 by asylum

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 Genre(s):  Biographical • Personal • None
 Type:  Poetry
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Looking for someone to review my first short poem.

Life's Repeat  (ASR) A short poem about some parts of my life. First time writing poetry. #2339452 by Rowan Oakenscale

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 Genre(s):  None • None • None
 Type:  Fiction
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Hello, while this story is incomplete I still would greatly value feedback, thank you!

Trial by Fairy  (E) An Orc stands trial for killing a human (Incomplete due to writers block) please be honest #2339155 by Fake Nate

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 Genre(s):  Sci-fi • None • None
 Type:  Fiction
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Part of a cycle of sci-fi stories called The Exiles. Looking for honest opinions and critique. I know I can always do something better: any ideas?

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All the New Gods  (13+) Polides rules the new world, and the path to the old gods is closed. But by whom? #2337539 by Jeffrey Meyer

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 Genre(s):  None • None • None
 Type:  Short Story
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Second chapter of a story I'm working on. i'd appreciate a review on it. though please spare us any confusion about the story itself by reading the first chapter. thank you.

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Memories by colours(2)  (E) Chapter 2: Green of a new chance #2338057 by Howl

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Action/Adventure • Death
 Type:  Chapter
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Hello, I am asking for someone to honestly review this chapter of what I am currently making. I ask for no special treatment, just honest reviews.

Chapter One of With Masked Eyes  (13+) This is the first chapter. Quick note: this is just kind of a rough draft. #2337257 by Rowan Oakenscale

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 Genre(s):  Political • Philosophy • Psychology
 Type:  Poetry
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Please review and let me know what you think! I warn you....it is political so I would appreciate if you just focus on the poetry itself. Thank you!

Narcissistic Drama  (13+) Political state of the United States and it's possible correction. #2338427 by Scotty1615

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 Genre(s):  Detective • Crime/Gangster • Drama
 Type:  Short Story
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Who is Katherina? What is she really doing in Thomasville? It appears she is just another runaway. Her parents, Jasper and Lydia, don't believe she's a runaway. That's why they have hired Sharoni to find her. Can Sharoni find her before it's too late?

Katherina  (18+) Where is Katherina Weston? That's what Private Detective Sharoni Bennett wants to know. #2338185 by PureSciFiPlus

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 Genre(s):  Music • Romance/Love • Relationship
 Type:  Poetry
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They take a deep dive into the emotions I felt after I lost my first love to Alcohol addiction. Not lost in the sense that he passed away, but they he became consumed by the addiction. I would love you to have a read and hear your thoughts :)

Echoes of Us  (E) . A poignant narrative about the lasting impact of a past relationship. #2337706 by Warm_Ri_Gards

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 Genre(s):  Nature • None • None
 Type:  Short Story
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my first story in years, so i want to see how the first chapter does. thank your in advance for your patience and review

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Memories by colours(1):Blue of hope  (E) first chapter of many for the first story i wrote in years. this is a work of fiction. #2337817 by Howl

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 Genre(s):  Paranormal • Detective • Writing.Com
 Type:  Short Story
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A short story about a private detective. It's a work in progress, and I'm adding chapters as I go. Would love some feedback on how I'm doing so far! Any tips or pointers on how to improve would be incredible. Thanks!

Another Day in Paradise  (E) A work in progress short story about a private detective. Adding chapters as I go. Cheers! #2337333 by L.A.Saxe

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Dark • Action/Adventure
 Type:  Chapter
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I have just written the first chapter of medieval fantasy novel. It involves an emperor who wants to protect his daughter form the e forces who are attacking the kingdom.

Marissa's Return C1  (18+) The emperor is concerned with his daughter being in Cyka, #2336872 by Richard Allen Edwards

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 Genre(s):  Cultural • History • Family
 Type:  Short Story
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Just read and tell me what you think, is it good enough to publish?

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Bacon Biscuits and Fried Pies  (E) A nostalgic piece about ordinary people set in the 1930s and early1940s in USA #2336896 by Prier

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • LGBTQ+ • None
 Type:  Fiction
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Second attempt at putting this story together. Could use some outside opinions to help me see what's working and what isn't. Fair warning, this is about 8 pages long, so definitely not a short story.

A Debt to Darkness - Chapter 1  (13+) Opening chapter at a first novel attempt. Lilith Underhill is trapped in a backwards city. #2336877 by Intoxikatie

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 Genre(s):  Children's • Children's • None
 Type:  Short Story
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This is my first Children's story. I haven't decided if it's publishable, but I'm looking for help to improve.

The Brothers and the Allegory Rose   (E) A short story about not letting your heart harden. Aimed at younger kids #2336672 by GreenLion93

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 Genre(s):  Philosophy • Death • Other
 Type:  Short Story
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Is the timing, theme, and overall feeling working? Are the small details saying what I want them to say? Saying something else? Saying nothing?
Let me know!
Thanks in advance

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Time  (E) You got another chance in life. To restart knowing what you know today. Would you do it? #2195865 by Mark Diaz

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 Genre(s):  Romance/Love • Drama • Family
 Type:  Short Story
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First draft of a story that I’d like to continue and would like reviews on

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A Love Beyond Pain  (13+) Greg longs to hear the word, "Daddy," but he's given up hope. #2333086 by Allan Charles 🐾

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • None • None
 Type:  Fiction
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My first attempt writing Fantasy. I want to do good right out of the gate - all opinions / critiques welcomed.

Dogwood  (18+) Chapter one (incomplete). #2335935 by BoB_618

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 Genre(s):  Romance/Love • Tragedy • Animal
 Type:  Short Story
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This is the first short story submission I've posted to WdC, and twas the second one I've ever written. This is redrafted revised version 3. I am open to any and all feedback.

Are You Sleeping?  (18+) Would-be actor John O'Malley is resigned to his farming life in the Ozarks. #2335900 by Conrad Moriarty

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 Genre(s):  Action/Adventure • Fantasy • None
 Type:  Chapter
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Continuation from the prologue of Blackstone Cove. This is a large chapter; 5265 words. How's the tone, the pacing and the action? Is the voicing enjoyable? Does it hold your interest? Because it's so large, it awards 5000 GPs. Thanks!

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Chapter 1: Call of the Sea  (18+) Chapter 1 of Brightstone Cove #2336286 by J. M. Kraynak

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 Genre(s):  Dark • Horror/Scary • Sci-fi
 Type:  Novella
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Please review my static item called The Shrinking Freshman.

The Shrinking Freshman  (13+) 19 year old Chet Richardson is shrinking. Is this the end for the young man? #2335135 by Farragut

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 Genre(s):  Melodrama • Action/Adventure • Young Adult
 Type:  Fiction
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Just a small snippet I wrote as practice! I’ve never written combat before, so I thought to give it a shot. If there’s anything I can improve to make the fight better, please let me know! Thank you so much for your time in advance.

Dance With Death  (18+) Practice exercise. It's my first attempt at a combat scene. Reviews/criticisms welcome! #2335884 by cha0ticditz

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 Genre(s):  Action/Adventure • Fantasy • Comedy
 Type:  Chapter
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Had this story in my head for a little while and figured I'd try to put it to paper. What are your thoughts on the prologue? Is the tone and voice good? Is the action gripping? Not supe worried about grammar right now, but if you want to, lemme know.

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Blackstone Cove  (18+) Opening scene #2335885 by J. M. Kraynak

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 Genre(s):  Sci-fi • Political • History
 Type:  Fiction
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This is a portion of a larger story originally intended to be a prologue. It is now just background world-building. I'm looking for general thoughts and suggestions regarding this as a reference to a larger work in progress.

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The History of Mars  (E) A brief history of the Martian Colony #2335702 by PCGuyIV

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 Genre(s):  Sci-fi • Horror/Scary • Philosophy
 Type:  Short Story
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Through fractured transmissions, former allies clash as AI autonomy spirals beyond control.

Would love feedback on what I think is a pretty solid epistolary sc-fi horror... of sorts. It's a 5.7k word short story. Would love your insights. And readership

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Transmissions from Terran Mars  (E) Through fractured transmissions, former allies clash as AI autonomy spirals beyond control #2335547 by Edified Ronin

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Mystery • Teen
 Type:  Short Story
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I wanted to capture the emotions of a character who wakes up and comes to the realization they suffer from amnesia. Who is he truly? And what about who he was before?

How did I do? Where can I improve? Is my prose any good?

Fire in the snow  (13+) I wake up once again in the snowy field, clueless as ever of who I should be. #2307892 by Esion

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 Genre(s):  Romance/Love • Food/Cooking • Travel
 Type:  Poetry
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I'm a little unimpressed by my rhyming scheme and some word choices. Does the surrealism create an invitation to the narrator's psyche? My food for thought...

The Beauty Queen  (13+) A working title #2335287 by Conrad Moriarty

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 Genre(s):  Sci-fi • Scientific • Philosophy
 Type:  Fiction
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Jonah debates an AI over sentience, but when Solace makes a deliberate mistake, Jonah is left questioning everything.
Looking for feedback on tension, dialogue, and theme. Honest reviews appreciated! Will review in return.

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The Last Argument  (E) An AI debates its own humanity—then does something Jonah can’t explain. #2335132 by Edified Ronin

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 Genre(s):  Technology • Fantasy • Thriller/Suspense
 Type:  Short Story
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I am looking for an honest review with suggestions for improvement.

I wrote this with the intention that it would be a character introduction in a book, however I am not sure how successful it is.

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Skelton Security  (13+) Jackie Skelton assesses the security of a bank and we learn a little about her. #2330533 by ZombeeLuv

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 Genre(s):  Drama • Comedy • Writing
 Type:  Fiction
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Please review my prose -- is it any good? any bad? Thanks and have a great day!

Poo  (13+) based on a true story #2334158 by sa_xe

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 Genre(s):  Drama • Holiday • Comedy
 Type:  Chapter
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Any and all feedback welcome - Thank you in advance

Glitter, Glam, and Gutter Games  (E) Glittering chaos erupts as secrets, schemes, and comedy collides in a wild glamorous saga! #2333274 by betsie

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 Genre(s):  Family • Transportation • None
 Type:  Poetry
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Trying to get this poem ship-shape for potential submission to publications. Thanks in advance, happy to reward helpful reviews!

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Changing Scenery  (E) Thoughts on a train ride from Boston to Georgia (Writer's Cramp winner) #2331370 by Andrew

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 Genre(s):  Action/Adventure • Technology • Fantasy
 Type:  Short Story
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Hello, folks! Thanks for reading and reviewing. I'd love to know if it flows well, if it's believable (if Bridgetta is believable, according to the context), and if some descriptions are lacking (like, should I describe Bridgetta and others more?).

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A Day at the Market  (E) Bridgetta is back at the market again. Except she noticed weird things she hadn't before. #2332716 by Cat Carroll

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 Genre(s):  Community • Cultural • History
 Type:  Poetry
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Please review.

Serpent lies...  (E) How do you begin to explain something so reality shattering? #2110735 by Perhaps

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Friendship • LGBTQ+
 Type:  Fiction
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This is a story I have written to go along my world building. The main character uses they/them pronouns and I'm wondering how it effects the flow for the reader. Any and all feedback is welcomed.

Kroon and the Minfur  (E) A short story of how Professor Kroon got their sight. #2332372 by Euri

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • Romance/Love • Drama
 Type:  Chapter
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Looking for gentle, relevant critique. This was meant to be a one-shot that allowed me some practice writing dialogue. Looking for feedback on how well it flowed and the ease of reading, as well as any additional comments on the story. Thank you!

Rose and Steel  (13+) The vicious seduction of magic and madness. #2332170 by Raeanne Lynn

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 Genre(s):  Romance/Love • Nature • None
 Type:  Poetry
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Hello! I'm just looking for some feedback...happy to exchange for a review of your own item of comparable length. Reviews are auto-rewarded 200 GPs as well.(if I did it right). Thank you!

Forever If I Have To  (13+) When it’s true love, you do what you have to 😉😊 #2331614 by elizjohn

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 Genre(s):  Emotional • Death • None
 Type:  Poetry
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Hello! I'm just looking for some feedback...happy to exchange for a review of your own item of comparable length. Reviews are auto-rewarded 200 GPs as well.(if I did it right). Thank you!

Epitaph  (13+) Wrote this a while back for the Cramp one day. We were supposed to write about an epitaph. #2331388 by elizjohn

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 Genre(s):  Sci-fi • Mystery • Thriller/Suspense
 Type:  Short Story
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Taffane has been dismissed from her Cargo Controller position. She has been thinking about leaving this position for another one. Now, she knows what this position will be. Taffane wants to know what is really happening on their spaceship.

Finding the Truth  (18+) Taffane is about to lose her job for something she hasn’t done. So, why is she smiling? #2331744 by PureSciFi

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 Genre(s):  Crime/Gangster • Dark • Thriller/Suspense
 Type:  Short Story
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Got annoyed by the response of my earlier work being "too long", so I wrote a short story. Or I guess a shorter story. More experimental though, made up card game rules. Probably sucks though, even though I like it.

Game Over Cards  (E) High-stakes game, where every gamble turns far greater than just the cards over the table. #2331235 by WriterDudette

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 Genre(s):  None • None • None
 Type:  Short Story
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I need serious criticism of my prose, form, and the general quality of this story. I wished to create a mysterious modern fantasy based on an Arabic-Islamic gothic setting.

The Great Old Black Book  (GC) Ibrahim is a man on a mission in the desert. #2331099 by The Black Pasha

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 Genre(s):  Horror/Scary • Fantasy • Action/Adventure
 Type:  Short Story
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Is this really horror? It didn't place in the horror contest it was written for. Any thoughts appreciated!

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A Dangerous Gift  (13+) What do you do when you are a Fire Bearer? #2325662 by Amethyst Angel 💐

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 Genre(s):  Fantasy • None • None
 Type:  Short Story
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Looking for overall reviews! Would love feedback on characters, worldbuilding, and the writing style in particular. Thanks in advance!

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The Eyes of the Goddess  (13+) "The Vessel of the South must burn away and burn anew. Let one fire dim, a new one burn!" #2330656 by Andrew

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 Genre(s):  Personal • Writing • Death
 Type:  Poetry
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Seeking honest and constructive feedback.

November Blues  (E) What I think and how I feel about this month every year. #2330262 by Imogen Elliott

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 Genre(s):  Sci-fi • Nonsense • None
 Type:  Short Story
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Hey, I'm looking for reviews on this short story I wrote after staying up too late. Thank you.

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Glerald and the galactic dumpster  (ASR) Glerald Glert's diary #2330209 by fayebed

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 Genre(s):  Romance/Love • None • None
 Type:  Fiction
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Honest and helpful feedback please

Where Life Leads  (18+) Sample - please give me feedback #2329210 by Emily Whrights

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 Genre(s):  Writing • None • None
 Type:  Fiction
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Looking for an honest critique.

A Doctor's Hope for Housing  (E) A Case-Study #2328615 by Eloi Serre

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 Genre(s):  Drama • Mystery • Romance/Love
 Type:  Novel
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A complete romance/mystery seeking reviews. There is an Auto-Reward of 1,000 GPs for reviews and comments per chapter (39 plus an epilogue). I always reward more for useful and in-depth reviews. Thanks in advance.

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Shadow of the White Woods  (18+) Exiled to a village in medieval Denmark, Stígandr struggles to right a wrong. (complete) #2300925 by K Renée

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 Genre(s):  Erotica • Romance/Love • Drama
 Type:  Preface
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This is intended to be a prologue or preface to my novel. I wanted it to have some erotica in the story's theme but more on the romantic side with emotional closeness and involvement.

This moment is supposed to be a highlighted moment between them.

A Sentimental Affair  (GC) He is married, She's been through trauma. Holding on by a thread, yet only he can see it. #2325340 by Barbara Williams

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