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#4742521

Review of ~Singing In Strange Places?~

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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THE POLL

A very engaging poll about where you like to sing your favorite tunes.

WHAT I LIKED

I think with a poll you need a strong introduction and a great question and this poll has both. The introduction draws you right in with it's conversational style of writing. The tone is light-hearted and endearing, and let's face it, it's a question we "struggle" with every day. Glad to see I'm not alone.

ENGAGING

The introduction draws the poll taker in with it's heartwarming, sincere tone.

VARIETY

There were a lot of choices for answers. I didn't realize how many places we sing tunes at!

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. If anything, and this is minor, I like that the question is bolded, but I might increase the font on it so it's more catching to eye.

PARTING THOUGHTS

Great question! I thought the poll was a lot of fun. I did notice it has a lot of responses, which is awesome.

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#4742470

Review of ATTENDANCE SHEET

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

GAMES OF THRONES MESSAGE BOARD/ATTENDENCE REVIEW

This is a review for "ATTENDANCE SHEET"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE MESSAGE BOARD

The Message Board serves as a Guestbook for the author.

WHAT I LIKED

What I loved about the guestbook is how the author has chosen a "Back to School" theme and is calling it "Attendance." Other items in the author's port are also school themed, so this is a nice compliment to the over all portfolio.

ENGAGING

The person popping in is invited to sign the attendance log. After all, one wants credit for being in the right place at the right time. The tone of the forum is light-hearted and endearing, encouraging the visitor to leave a missive.

VARIETY

A lot of people have stopped by and left a note, which was nice to see, if anything, it was a while since the last person prior to me had popped in - 27 days, I think. In that regard, I might suggest follow up to encourage engagement. Follow up could be anything. A question a day to bring people back or a prompt like flash fiction. It could be a school based prompt to stay on theme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

I liked the graphic in the introduction. It set the tone of what to expect from the forum. It's always a good thing to take attendance.

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#4742465

Review of TeaTotallyTime

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

GAMES OF THRONES WORD SEARCH REVIEW

This is a review for "TeaTotallyTime"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

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THE WORD SEARCH

The Word Search has an Alice in Wonderland tea party theme. The tone of the activity is light-hearted and fun.

WHAT I LIKED

Great selection of words. All the words used were in association with a tea party and there were a lot teas being offered. Honestly, I'm craving tea now.

ENGAGING

With this word search, I only spotted a few words off the bat, and I had to hunt a bit more than I thought I would, but it was enough to keep hunting and just when I wanted to give up, I spied another word.

VARIETY

There were a lot of words, which I liked. All the words were items you would find at a tea party which was nice. Nothing seemed out of place.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

If anything, I might suggest adding more content to the introduction to make it more inviting for the activity taker. Suggestion only - catch their eye with a whimsical graphic of a tea party or use WDC to vary the size and font of the introductory paragraph. I enjoyed the word search and would recommend others to try it.

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#4742437

Review of Cure for the Common Coffee

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

GAMES OF THRONES FLASH FICTION REVIEW

This is a review for "Cure for the Common Coffee"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

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THE STORY

John writes coffee reviews for a living. It's not a bad job, but you'll soon discover it takes a lot of character to write coffee reviews.

WHAT I LIKED

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coffee!! Every drop. Just like John. hehe. I love how John has an old-fashioned, easy-going way about himself.

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 3rd person limited from John's perspective. Past tense is used in the story. Honestly, I love past tense stories.

DIALOGUE

There is no dialogue used.

OPENING PARAGRAPH

The opening paragraph put me right in the moment next to my own coffee maker, taking in the rich aroma of my own fufu coffee.

CHARACTERS

What I liked about John as a character, is he's fun, quirky, and easily relatable, even if he likes to use a typewriter. Heck, if it wasn't for typewriting class in High School, I wouldn't be here. Sometimes, it's best not to fiddle with what works.

FLOW & PACING

It's perfect. It wasn't too slow, and not too fast either. I was right in the moment with John.

MECHANICS

I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. My only suggestion here, and it's minor and a matter of style - maybe increase the font a little to make it easier on the eyes.

PARTING THOUGHTS

The title fits the story well. Good economy of words communicates well and evokes emotion. Nice, light-hearted comedic beats. I highly recommend a cup of "John" when you sit down to read!

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#4742294

Review of Saint Paddy’s Day

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In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group

Rated: E

| (4.5)

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THE POEM

A lively look at the man himself, St. Patrick.

WHAT I LIKED

I loved the opening stanza, "Shamrock worn, coloured green, Today's the day to wear it be seen." It drew me right in.

STRUCTURE

This is an acrostic poem. An acrostic poem is where the first letter of a line is used to spell out a word or a phrase in the poem. There is an AABBCC etc rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. I liked how the each line started in the color green. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easy to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Asps, away from him they ran," -- I thought it was a very creative way to weave in the legend of St. Patrick driving out snakes from Ireland.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I loved how the poem ended, bringing it full circle and to the modern day with what we usually to do celebrate - dance, drink, and a pint of Guiness. A very imaginative poem that puts the reader in the moment! Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules.

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#4742193

Review of St. Patrick's Day Shenanigans

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

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THE POEM

The poem captures the essence of St. Patrick's Day shenanigans.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked how the poem framed St. Patrick's Day in a fun light.

STRUCTURE

This is an acrostic poem. An acrostic poem is where the first letter of a line is used to spell out a word or a phrase in the poem. There is no set rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. I liked how the author highlighted the beginning letter in green. That was a nice touch.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Singing Irish poems Till the cows come home." That put a smile on my face. It was a nice way to set the mood and tone of the poem.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

A fun and enjoyable poem that captures the essence of a warmhearted St. Patrick's Day. My only suggestion, and this would be a matter of style, is to add some limited punctuation to give the poem more a rthymic flow. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules.

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#4741447

Review of My Christmas Prayer

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

GAMES OF THRONES POEM REVIEW

This is a review for "My Christmas Prayer"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

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THE POEM

The poem is a heartfelt look at how the author's friend had touched their life.

WHAT I LIKED

The poem is poignant and heartfelt. It leaves the reader on an upbeat note, but it goes through emotional highs and lows as it dips and ebbs through life. In this way, it makes an emotional connection with the reader that resonates.

STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem with no apparent rythme scheme. The poem reads more like a prose as there are full sentences. The poem presents itself as a Christmas tree which is appealing as well as being done in green.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. If anything, I suggest using WDC ML to increase the font so as to make it easier on the eyes for the WDC reader.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "To make it through the "tough times" with a strong heart and with wisdom." I think all of us strive for a strong heart when times are tough.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The poem is heartwarming and bittersweet to read. I have no suggestions for improvement. I thought the title was perfect for the presentation.

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#4741446

Review of How is it that

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

GAMES OF THRONES POEM REVIEW

This is a review for "How is it that"

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THE POEM

The poem ponders the question "how is it that" I can't forget about you?

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the honest introspection the poem offers. Even when 2 years have passed, the author can remember her with such clarity it's unnerving. I had something similar happen to me and I would consider this man my "first" that I was in love with. Even now, there are times I think "how is it that...?"

STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem with no apparent rythme scheme. The poem reads more like a prose as there are full sentences.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. If anything, I suggest using WDC ML to increase the font so as to make it easier on the eyes for the WDC reader.

DESCRIPTIONS

There's no vivid descriptions - just everyday descriptions. One that sticks out to me is it's been two long years.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I thought the title matched the thoughts and sentiments of the poem well and evoked the reader to ponder the "what if" in their own lives. That's how the poem emotionally resonates with the reader. The poem is easy to read and understand.

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#4741371

Review of Idalin's Patio

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

GAMES OF THRONES ESSAY REVIEW

This is a review for "Idalin's Patio"

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THE MESSAGE FORM

The forum invites WDC Community members to stop on by, introduce themselves, say hi and share fellowship and friendship.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the heartwarming tone the introduction set. I enjoyed the greeting: "Other beverages are available for those over 21, but tea is the best." I agree! Tea is the best!

INTRODCUTION

The introduction uses a graphic to help set the mood and tone of the forum along with a quote from Jimmy Buffet. If anything, there is a link to an invalid item in the introduction that I might suggest cleaning up.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML in the introduction to switch up the colors. It catches the reader's eyes more.

EMOTIONAL CONNECTION

The author connects with their visitors using a variety of techniques, such as heartwarming pictures and whimsical sayings. If anything the last entry was 17 years ago, so I'd love to see more recent interaction. I would be more than willing to stop back and rate the forum higher if there is more recent again and the invalid item is attended to.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title is reflective of the forum and very inviting. See above for suggestions.

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#4741362

Review of Survival

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

GAMES OF THRONES ESSAY REVIEW

This is a review for "Survival "

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

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THE ESSAY

A look at homeless. The author shares his thought on homeless, possible causes, choices, and how one choice can make a difference in your life.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the tone of the essay. It wasn't accusatory or "woe is me," but a thoughtful look at what causes homelessness and what can be done. Ultimately, it comes down to the choices one makes. Seeking the choice to pick oneself out of homelessness requires a lot of courage and then will power to follow through.

STRUCTURE

This is a paragraph formatted essay.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. If anything, I might suggest the use of WDC ML to make the font bigger so it would be easier to read for the reader.

EMOTIONAL CONNECTION

The author speaks in a tone that allows for an emotional connection with the reader. He sheds light on a problem that many might not understand to include the causes, drugs and gambling. The piece is poignant and very introspective.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Genuine, heartfelt, and honest. The title is reflective of the content. I have no suggestions for improvement.

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#4741351

Review of DragonBlue's Variety c-Notes

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

GAMES OF THRONES CNOTE REVIEW

This is a review for "DragonBlue's Variety c-Notes"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

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THE CNOTES

Dragonblue Variety Cnotes has a collection of cnotes for any occasion, which include humor, to pick one up when feeling blue, friendship, and sorry.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the heartfelt phrases each cnote contained. If anything, I might suggest changing up the font a little bit, as the font was a little striking.

ENGAGING

The cnotes are deeply rich in color, and if anything, I thought they were almost too vivid for my eyes, so my suggestion here would be to tone down the color plate a little bit.

VARIETY

There are ten cnotes which offer a nice amount of variety. There were a lot of nice heartwarming choices for viewers to choose from.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Nice use of WDC ML in the introduction to "hook" the viewer and get them intrigued to visit the collection.

PARTING THOUGHTS

I thought the price point on the cnotes were a tad high, so I might suggest lowering the price a little. I would recommend WDC members so stop on by and check them out.

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#4741346

Review of Exercising Faith

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

GAMES OF THRONES CNOTE REVIEW

This is a review for "Exercising Faith"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

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THE CNOTES

Exercising Faith Cnotes are a heartwarming collection of cnotes that are faith inspired with quotes from the Bible.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the whimiscal graphic used for "A little Joy" which caught my attention most, but I also liked the heartwarming message for friendship, and I thought the graphic for "Hear my plea" struck a poignant chord.

ENGAGING

The cnotes offer a nice variety of messages, that while faith based, aren't too preachy to those who aren't of a Christian background. These are cnotes anyone of faith would feel comfortable using.

VARIETY

There are three cnotes in the collection. In that regard, I would like to see the collection expanded.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML in the introduction to "hook" the viewer and get them excited. They help to set the mood and tone of the collection.

PARTING THOUGHTS

Very creative and inspirational. I thought the Cnotes had a nice price point that WDC members could afford. I would recommend this collection for WDC Members.

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#4741343

Review of Elegant Poetry cNotes

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

GAMES OF THRONES CNOTE REVIEW

This is a review for "Event Notes"

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THE CNOTES

Elegent Poetry Cnotes combines easy on the eyes visual, nature inspired graphics with verses of poetry that is meant to inspire, motivate, and spread positivity.

WHAT I LIKED

I really liked the fact the photos used in the cnotes were original photography and that they were mixed with original poetry from authors here on WDC. That was a really nice way to bring community members togethe.

ENGAGING

The cnotes offer a nice variety of colors which catch the reader's eye. Due to the creativity, the viewer needs to slow down and "smell the roses" so to speak, but it is a task that is nice to do. It also allows the viewer time to pair up the cnote that is just perfect for the intended recipient.

VARIETY

There are nine cnotes which offer a nice amount of variety. There were a lot of choices with a focus on nature such as spring or the sea.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML in the introduction to "hook" the viewer and get them excited.

PARTING THOUGHTS

I love how heartwarming the cnotes where and I thought they were very creative! Well done. I highly recommend this collection for WDC Members.

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#4740775

Review of Tristeza

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Rated: E

| (3.5)

GAMES OF THRONES ESSAY REVIEW

This is a review for "Tristeza"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

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THE ESSAY

Written in 2020, a mother struggles with the restrictions that Covid-19 has set on the nation.

WHAT I LIKED

The essay tackles a very recent topical subject. It paints an accurate picture of what was going on at the time and the emotional whiplash parents had to deal with.

CONTENT

I am not familiar with the title. The essay is not long. It describes the problem and offers ideas to deal with the lockdown, but no solutions. The danger of kids leaning on the computer for interaction is a bit scary. The last part of the essay tugs on the heartstrings.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes. I might suggest a minor edit for punctuation. I might also suggest increasing the font to make it easier for the reader's eyes on WDC.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I think a lot of parents can connect with the author's push/pull of acknowledging their children seek a cortisol boost by being on the computer doing other things than homework and wanting to offer them something other than the quick, addictive fix.

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#4740768

Review of 10 Days of Spring

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Rated: E

| (3.0)

GAMES OF THRONES BOOK REVIEW

This is a review for "10 Days of Spring"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

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THE BOOK

The book contains 7 entries and is fantasy themed.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the title. It caught my attention and made me curious about the book.

INTRODCUTION

The introduction is very plain and doesn't really set an idea in the reader's mind what to expect. I might suggest expanding the introduction by creating a 3-5 sentence blurb that teases what the plot is about. A more fleshed out blurb could also be used here. If so, I would use the first paragraph to explain the hero or heroine, the next paragraph to explain the conflict, and the last to set the rising action.

I would also using a graphic to set the tone or mood of the book.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. on the introduction or the chapter headings. If anything, I might suggest using a larger font in the entries as the current is hard to read on the eyes.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The book has a lot of potential but none of the entries have been developed since 2014. The entries are short which encourages the reader to pop in, read, and move on.

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#4740758

Review of In the end

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

GAMES OF THRONES POEM REVIEW

This is a review for "In the end"

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE POEM

The poem takes a look at what could be a modern plight for people who have no money and struggle without it.

WHAT I LIKED

The poem offers several questions for the reader to ponder. What is the power of money? Why do we let people who have none live in such poverty? Can we do better as a society? Is this nature vs nuture? Very topical questions for our society to tackle.

STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem with no set rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes. I might suggest a minor edit for punctuation. There are ("") after Hold your head high which seems oddly placed. Another minor suggestion - I might suggest making the font bigger on WDC so it is easier to visually read.

DESCRIPTIONS

The descriptions are very "succinct," for example -- "breath a cloud of stale liquor" and "tattered clothes, clutching a fistful of dirt." The descriptions put the reader in the moment and tug on the heartstrings.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I liked this stanza:

"Broke people.
Broke-n people.
Broken."

The simple stanza invites the reader to delve into the progression of how broke people become broken. The poem is easy to read, but challenges one to take a long, hard look at life at its rawest.

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#4740746

Review of I am jobless

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Rated: E

| (3.5)

GAMES OF THRONES POEM REVIEW

This is a review for "I am jobless "

from House Targaryen for "Game of Thrones"

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

THE POEM

Does being an overachiever disadvantage others?

WHAT I LIKED

The poem tackles a very topical subject for the modern day and challenges the reader to look at the differences between the overachiever and the jobless. Is there a middle ground? Could the unemployed storyteller have been more tactful in getting his point across? Would that have kept him the job? Questions to ponder.

STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem with no set rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes. I might suggest a minor edit for punctuation. There is a (") after matches your character which seems oddly placed.

DESCRIPTIONS

The descriptions are very "to the point," for example -- "he stares at me." In that regard, the descriptions do a good job of matching the harsh tone of the poem.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The poem is easy to read. The mood of the poem is somber. No likes losing a job.

The poem reflects the reality of life. Even friends, who gifted with an advantage, find it a struggle to think of others when money is involved. "Money makes people funny" is an expression that rings true time and time again. Another thing I thought of - when two sides are polar opposite, how can there be reconciliation?

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Review of Crashing Waves

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM

A day at the beach framed between the waves that crash on the seashore.

WHAT I LIKED

I loved how the poem progressed to tell a story. Well done!

STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. There were no set rythming patterns.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/ punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Dark clouds gather ominously above the scavenging seagulls"

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I have no suggestions for improvement. The poem progressed line by line as it told it's story. I could picture everything. I loved how the repetition of the last line, "crash upon the seashore" ties the poem together. Very good storytelling!

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#4737394

Review of Shadow Over July

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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM

July is a steady month - known for summer and vacations, but as memories fade, just how steady was it?

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the visuals the poem evoked. Simple, yet succinct word play puts the reader in the moment.

STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. There was no set rythme patterns.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to make the poem easy to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "as the skies cast shadows over July."

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I have no suggestions for improvement. With few words the author conveys vivid visuals and evokes emotions well. Everyone thinks of July as summer. It's time to enjoy the nice weather, play, go on vacations, and yet, every so often, carefree summer can be haunted by shadows. While the poem hints at weather changes and life obligations, I think uncertainty can be whatever is challenging you in your own life. It's this juxapostion, well done, that dares the reader to go deeper.

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Review of Storm Music

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM

The poem tells a story through weather and storms that mirror the highs and lows of our own life.

WHAT I LIKED

I loved the word play; it deepened the expression of the poem. I felt like I went a journey and discovered my own weathered traveled life.

STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. There was no set rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Rainbows ribboned across sunlit skies" Great visual with succinct wording.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I have no suggestions for improvement. The title fits the poem well. A great read that challenges the reader to take time and reflect, leaving one on a positive note.

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Review of Light

Review by StephBee - Hous...

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM

A poem about light, the power of it's reflection, and that special something that hovers just above the light.

WHAT I LIKED

I enjoyed the word play; it deepened the expression of the poem and made me think of different angles of interpretation.

STRUCTURE

This is a cinquain poem. This a 5 line stanza poem. The lines are 2, 4. 6, 8 and 2 syllables.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes. The poem is easy to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "light is dancing" -- light is electric, vibrant, and alive. Light gives life.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I loved the flow of the poem and the invitation to give light your own interpretation. Was it a lover basking in the light of lovemaking or simply the early morning twilight breaking out the positivity in one's soul? I enjoyed this poem very much!

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Review of Spring

Review by StephBee - Hous...

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Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM

This poem deal with nature, specifically spring.

WHAT I LIKED

I enjoyed the visual and how it put me in the moment.

STRUCTURE

This is a haiku. A haiku is a short form of Japanese poetry, traditionally with 3 lines, and a 5,7,5 syllable pattern. The poem here matches traditional form.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes. The poem is easy to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "A cardinal pair" - It was descriptive enough to picture two red birds on an early spring tree branch with green buds just popping out.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The haiku also had a challenge - not to use the letter "E." Very good job writing a visual without that letter! The haiku did a great job capturing the following elements; simplicity, directness of expression and intensity. Well done!

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#4736353

Review of Northwoods Summer

Review by StephBee - Hous...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM

The poem is a relaxing camping experience during the summer at a lake.

WHAT I LIKED

I loved the progression of the story in the poem. A succinct use of words had me right there relaxing and enjoying all the day had to offer. A wonderful experience of the five senses.

STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. There were some stragetic rhymes, but no set patterns.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML. It makes the poem easy to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Gliding across glass" when describing canoeing across the lake, but honestly, the poem is full of rich description.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The poem opens with an invitation for you to close your eyes and imagine. It comes full circle when it does the same at the end. Brilliant. The first invitation plants the hint of being transported to another time and place. The 2nd invitation leaves you longing to visit Northwoods. An enjoyable, heartwarming poem!

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#4735986

Review of Cupid Slam

Review by StephBee - Hous...

In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group

Rated: E

| (4.5)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

Thank you for entering the Bard's Hall Cupid Slam Contest for FEB 2024. Since this is a unique contest, here is what I'm looking for:

Must slam that beastly little arrow-flinger, CUPID!

Must be Poetry Only, any form or free verse -- doesn't matter so long as it's just plain AWFUL!

Line Count up to 60 or fewer. Place line count at the bottom of the poem.

This poetry entry MUST be written for this contest, February 2024! If it's a leftover slam from another time and place it will be disqualified.

Remember that "bad poetry" doesn't mean just misspellings. We are looking for the really creative kind of "bad" that makes us cringe and groan over its terribleness!

A ONE-STAR RATING is the ultimate goal, here. We will award the "best" one-starred poems as the winners.

And now... onto the review....

THE POEM

Cupid shoots the arrows, spreading the love.

WHAT I LIKED/AKA CUPID SLAM aka GOOD, BAD, or UGLY:

SLAM: GOOD. Cupid is told to go away until next year.

Cupid is doing what cupid does.

STRUCTURE

This is a rythming poem with the 2nd and 4th lines rythming. The 1st and 3rd lines do not rythme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

There's not much of a slam. The poem has a nice flow to it. Worthy of a 4.5 Star.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall FEB 2024 Contest. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules.

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Review of Ode to Cupid

Review by StephBee - Hous...

In affiliation with Bard's Hall Group

Rated: E

| (4.0)

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

Thank you for entering the Bard's Hall Cupid Slam Contest for FEB 2024. Since this is a unique contest, here is what I'm looking for:

Must slam that beastly little arrow-flinger, CUPID!

Must be Poetry Only, any form or free verse -- doesn't matter so long as it's just plain AWFUL!

Line Count up to 60 or fewer. Place line count at the bottom of the poem.

This poetry entry MUST be written for this contest, February 2024! If it's a leftover slam from another time and place it will be disqualified.

Remember that "bad poetry" doesn't mean just misspellings. We are looking for the really creative kind of "bad" that makes us cringe and groan over its terribleness!

A ONE-STAR RATING is the ultimate goal, here. We will award the "best" one-starred poems as the winners.

THE POEM

Cupid is a sweetie as he goes about looking for lovers.

WHAT I LIKED/AKA CUPID SLAM aka GOOD, BAD, or UGLY:

SLAM: GOOD. Cupid is a jolly fellow with fluffy wings. He smiles and giggles and is a sweet cutie with rosy cheeks.

It's a pretty sweet, kindhearted description.

STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem with no apparent rythme scheme.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

No slam, here, just love little baby Eros. Worthy of a 4 star.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall FEB 2024 Contest. Line count was listed in accordance with the contest rules.