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Review by ~SilverMoon~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Prodical Son,

I just can't seem to stop looking into your port. Well, I can say all if the places you mentioned sound interesting.

I'm having a hard time thinking up a clever and accurate place I'd like to work but surely it would be some kind of investigative project, for lack of better terms. Do we look inward or outward?

Mind (psychology), body, or (celestial) outer space and Galaxys. I can't decide.


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Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello again Prodigal Son,

I decided to see what else was in your port and found "The Dubious Case for Life on Mars."  [E]. You've again gave a thorough analysis. This time of the idea of life on Earth vs Mars.

This made me think of how for quite some time they'd mentioned trips to other planets for the general population. While that notion might work out okay but some irresponsible person us sure to create some problem in the way or while there.

Imagine a conversation like:

"We just got back from Cocoa Beach, Florida. It was so lovely there and the ocean was so warm like bathtub water."

"That sounds so nice and fun."

"So what have you been up to?"

"Not much really. We did finally get away though for a while."

"Oh? Where'd you go?"

"Oh. We took an impromptu flight to outer space."


Okay, that scenario wasn't so far fetched as I read they've already done this.they charged $250,000.Really? I wonder what you get while in flight, snacks and sleep masks?

I could think of much more better things to do with that much money.

The last lines I found amusing.

Winters a smidgeon too cold. For now, who knows the reasons?

* One thing's for sure. For now. No one is answering the phone or taking our messages.

"Hello? Hello, can you hear us now? Hello?!"

Your item is as usual well written and informative.

Thanks for sharing.




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Review of eTIQUeTTe  
Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Prodical Son,

I just read your item "eTIQUeTTe"  [E].

You made some good points about people not taking the time to address people properly. I usually do use whatever name they have chosen, but sometimes in an email I might not especially if it's someone I'm more familiar with. It's not because of disrespect though.

I'm guilty. I have emailed someone bear the end of the day and am frustrated with my device when it does silly things like typos, jumps around making me end up typing on the wrong line somewhere other than it should or often my while message disappears. It kind if sets you back especially if it happens more than once.

Yet, I see what you're saying.

Anyway, your piece was written well. I saw no errors and you helped others see what might not be acceptable.

Thanks for sharing.


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Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Piripica,

I just read your short but sweet poem called--Should it Rain.

It's simple and easy to read. And has a nice rythym.

The formatting fits this piece perfectly and the little bee at the end makes it extra special.

Good job. Thanks for sharing.


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Review of MATCHBOX UNDIES  
Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello Sandra Lynn,

I just read your item titled Matchbox undies. I found in interesting and amusing of m some parts.

I remember my foster sister, named Sandra Lynn. She and one of my sister's had Barbie dolls. I was already a teen by then and so not as interested, but curious why they what the attraction was. I also wondered what I had missed as a child. I don't ever remember having dolls. Only later did I have a few stuffed animals.

One day while babysitting Sandra Lynn and my younger sister, I decided to join them in Barbie doll playtime. I even gave them voices, but the girls didn't seem to inpressed. For the life of me, I just couldn't stay interested, especially when my efforts seemed thankless.

I never thought a out the fact Barbie didn't have undies. Well, I do think later Mattel, Barbie Dolls makers, decided she should have them.

I imagine that tiny brassieres be too would be difficult to maneuver. Such is life for Barbie.

My other younger sister's name is Barbie. She's tiny even as an adult I won't go into the details about her undergarments or the lack thereof.

I only found one place where I felt it needed a word.
Here it is:

Our philosophy was (to) share everything.

I enjoyed reading how Barbie, your companion, went everywhere you went.

Sounds like it was fun at least for someone.


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Review of Lonely in a Crowd  
Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello again Christiana,

It looks like I'm doing a port raid and yours is the one. It's because I like your work, although sometime it needs a little editing. I know my items need that too.

Still your focus allows us to visualize what's going on with the character in stories or what emotional event is in the poem.

I totally get this poem about other people. There's a comfort zone in choosing your battles wisely. There's times where as much as I wish to tell them that's not true but instead I hold back. People can say anything they wish to but we don't have to accept it as true because we know that's not what we meant and not true.

The truth is we never know for sure why someone says or acts a certain way that doesn't feel so good on the recieving end.

Good job.


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Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello again Christiana,
It's so painful when you lose a pet,who you have taken care if, shared life with, been places with.

I like how we are taken through the feelings expressed here. Yet there's a feeling of peace within the sadness. We know they aren't suffering anymore.

Some of us have faith that there will be a reunion at another place in time.

I didn't see anything that needed editing.

Thanks for sharing this thoughtful poem.


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Review of The River  
Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Zen,

I just read The River. At first we weren't sure what was going on but this is a good thing as it raises story questions and we are pretty sure that will be answered later on.

This is written so well. Your story is concise yet descriptive. We can visualize this place and it's mood.

The dialogue is a plus and it's done well.

The ending pulls it all together. I didn't see anything that needed editing. It's perfect as is.

I enjoyed reading this. Thanks for sharing.


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Review of Desert Rose  
Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi. Turtle,

I saw this in your port and decided to review it. I'm not sorry I did.

*Pencil* The other hand trembling forward, point(ed) in at the child

* Good descriptive imagery here:

It was then that I noticed their clothes, tattered shreds of cloth that hung loose in places, but inexplicably clung tight in others. Black and red spots glued the cotton to their bodies in multiple places, and the mother’s right knee was seeping with reddish green foam.

*Pencil* I held out my arm to her, braced my hand upon he(r) elbow.

Comments: From the first we got a sense of what each person was doing and it hinted at why each were there.
Nice.

Then we gradually saw all that was happening, and it's results, as the woman and child crossed the open desert.

Then we see the person who was in the tower help them if he could save them, then lead them both to safety.

I retesting read, well done.

Thanks for the read.



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Review of One Last Request  
Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Brenpoet,.

This is yet another sweet song in honor of a beloved pet that crossed Rainbow Bridge.

They might be fine, yet not forgotten.
And so it is.

Nice rhyme in this piece and appropriate words matching the title.

Favorite part:

I'm free as stars above,
I'm living still within your heart,
In memories of love.


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Review by ~SilverMoon~
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Brenpoet,

I just read your Smitten with a Kitten.

What a happy poem honoring your sweet cat. They do bring such joy to our lives.
Sorry for the loss of your daughter. I always wonder if qthe angels have a hand in finding our pets. Maybe they are the angels looking over us.
Clever titles. Cute.
Nice format--approprite to to the title.
Good rhyming feels playful.
No errors.

Good job on this. Thanks for sharing.


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Review of Broken?  
Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: E | (4.5)
D.E. Bozeman,

So much pain is expressed here. It's as if the person feels trapped and sees no end to the misery. It makes me feel sad too as I can only imagine the day to day issues that just seem to make things worse.

I found a few errors. One was the word pain. I believe you spelled it pian.

Also here:

make it,
(becasue) because others hurt me, but they know not what they do,
(ad\nd) and that I will let them, all (becasue) because of you.


The writing raises a question as to why those ones are allowed to hurt because of (you) whoever it is. Why is it okay?




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Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
D.E. Bozeman,

Yeowch! This one is truly sad. It appears that this person is in such emotional pain there seems to be nobody who will listen. Such a sad way to feel.

I think sometimes there's many people who feel this way now and then. Hopefully not often and they are able to pick themselves up a d dust themselves off.

It helps to have a goal. Other people, some anyway, often have their own agenda (even if they mean well) and don't understand another person's perspective.

That's not saying that everyone is like that.

I see a lot of emotion in this item.

No errors that I noticed, except one.

as I slowly drift away and long for it all (jsut) just to end.

I'm hope this isn't about you and how you feel, and I hope that you can find some sense of peace and know you are loved. Find someone you trust to talk to.
.


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Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Myles Abroad,

Wow. This does apply to the things going on now. If you don't go along with the crowd, however wrong they are the mob tends to attack.

Yourfreedom to support what you believe in what you believe becomes a problem for them. We've all seen how things get distorted and then passed around to others who either don't know or don't care to know.

The scenario did bring up feelings and the people interacted in ways that felt realistic.

I saw no errors in this piece. Thank you for sharing.


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Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello Knightscribe,
I noticed you on WDC and had to take a look at your portfolio.I found this item.

There is much rich imagery in this piece, which allows the reader to be there to see and hear what is happening.

We see the king, the royals, and and his people interact.

But later we also see the private side revealing concern and support for the prince.

And the prince's hearfelt guilt and concern that he failed, yet the king is his morale support, building him up to know his own goodness.

Nicely done. Good dialogue. Nice expression of emotion.

*Pencil* The only thing I would suggest is adding a line space between dialogues.
The other thing I noticed is although there is a king and prince and duke. They have no names like Prince Harry or King David. I might have mentioned it at least once, then again. this is a short scene not a long story yet it could still be.

Thank you for sharing.


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Review of Overexposed  
Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Mirdee,

I just happened by your port and saw this. I became curious

What a funny little story. The dialogue felt real and the reactions also.

The premise is a rare experience, which literally caught the guy with his pants down or should I say missing.



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Review of Lone Wolf  
Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Nick Knight. I was just reading your story Lone Wolf.

I already read three chapters and am wanting more.

It is very easy to read and understand. It's format looks good too.

And you have dialogue. I do love dialogue, but you also have just enough exposition and some nice imagery, which let's us know what's going on. Your transitions are smooth also.

I loved finding this item. I don't know much about anthro animals but do appreciate a good read.
I like that you provided a link to the next chapters. Is there more?

I did find an error or two which can be easily fixed. I don't remember which chapter it was in. I think the word was well, but I think you meant we'll.

Thanks for the read.


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Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Perry Ride,
This was an interesting article about coffee.
What wasn't covered was the benefits if drinking coffee.

I didn't know it had been banned in those countries mentioned.

Here in the usa they'd banned booze many years ago, but that just made people who enjoyed it want it more and ended up having it anyway, but not where
anyone could see. After a time they allowed it.

Wierd thing is during this pandemic. They closed churches but allowed the sale of liquor in liquor stores.

In other words it sends a message. You can drink yourself silly but you can't go to church. Crazy.

Back 5o the coffee issue, I like ut now and then. It's comforting to have a nice warm cup of coffee plus it has antioxidents in it.

In this article I saw no errors nor anything to fix.

Thanks for sharing.

.


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Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello WD Wilcox,

I just noticed "The Man Who Was Not Himself"  [13+] in your port. I decided to read more. I wasn't disappointed.

This tells the story of a man who had everything yet have it up because he had a dream telling him to.


Vivid imagery here. Those last words say so much. : deformed dragon and, as it bent over me, it dripped decayed flesh and spittle upon my head.

The house in the jungle is where tension begins and ebbs them rises higher.

When I read that those demons were taking him apart then putting him together it made me laugh be ause I can imagine a kid fighting over a toy.

Good job. I liked it even if it had creepy parts. But you needed that.

Thanks for sharing.

I do not see anything requiring me to use my red pencil. Haha.


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Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Linnann,

I happened to notice this story and gained interest as I read along.

There are a few errors, but nothing that can't be fixed easily if you wanted to. It's mostly comma errors. I edited my suggestions.
*Pencil*
You’d better go quickly to the great Wizard of Oz to help you(,) my dear!" cautioned Glenda.

Dorothy accompanied the portly, pint(-)sized mayor

"What do you mean(?)" gasped the Mayor(.)"
Removed the question mark, replaced it with a comma. and put the question mark after the word mean.

Here: but no one takes the red brick road!" Removed a.


I liked the choices of names for the Flylinx and how each name related to specific ones, therefore unique.

According to your prompt you have gave it an alternate ending and a positive one.

I could almost hear Dorothy speaking while reading the words. This all turned out nicely.

Please take what you wish of my review and ignore anything that you choose to.

Thanks for this fun and interesting read.





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Review of There Was Me  
Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello C. Harris,

I'm not good at poetry, but I do know what I like.

The formatting looks good.

The thoughts expressed reveals sadness yet this soul has inner strength even when feeling weak.

There is longing for what was. Hope that one day things will feel and be better. Choices we have to make one step at a time .

God knows the heart and knows us so well. It's as if God lives within us and everywhere.

Things don't always happen the way we want, when we want, or where we want, but surely will come to be.

Thanks for sharing.

God Bless. And Happy Easter.



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Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi QP doll,

I got a kick out of reading this. I had that uhoh feeling, yet the personas of these cats are hilarious as you portrayed them. At least nobody died. Haha

I read this part:
Eventually I see the door gradually open again. (I could almost hear the door creak open. Haha I'm thinking uhoh CujoKitty is on the loose again).

This was well written, timing was perfect and the actions felt real. I know quite well about the leg/ cat episode. I remember these feral kittens I tried to tame had decided my legs were trees to climb. Soon my legs lookedije pincushions minuses the pins!

Good read and well done. Loved it.
Thanks.




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Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: E | (4.0)

Hello Soul mates call

I found another item and here to give suggestions to make things more clear in your item.

Below are the suggestions and if don't agree feel free to ignore whatever part you don't like.

Have you ever been in love , how does that feels(?) Is it a good feeling or bad, (or) may be something between.

* was a housewife before and later worked as an assistant, giving a review on a book which somehow relates to her life. She also found her soulmate as the book continues while flipping through the pages.

There were more places where a word was missing. I'm thinking this might be because english might be a second language for the writer. I could be wrong.

Still the idea cones across to love all and appreciate all.

Thanks for sharing.





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Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Soulmates call,

I saw your item on a wdc and decided to have a closer look.

The item gives a perspective about soulmates. It explains how people react and also that love lives on. It gives advice of what to know when you need to grieve and how to get through it. It's written fairly well, but some places needed editing to make it more clear. Here are my suggestions below.

You're welcome to take what works for you and ignore what doesn't.
***

First I noticed that your first paragraph is very long
I would break it up.

Next I noticed you didn't have a line space between some of the paragraphs.

Also here are places I felt needed changing:

*We all have someone within our lives, we never wanna want to be apart from

* No maters matter
who they are, we have close relationships with them.

* Relaxed in their company, We love to hang out, laugh,with them share our stories with them, and may sometimes share gossip too.

* (Aside from) that, there is a saying that a blind (person) does realize what great blessing eyesight is.

* you can not cannot change a thing when it's done, move backward time. If your ego is stopping you from doing this(,) let it sink. I know you wouldn't want to regret it later. Every day many people die and most of them don't not from disease history, but die suddenly. I pray you will stay forever with your

* (For) the ones who have lost someone special to

I liked reading this item although it had a few unclear areas that need a small change. These are easily fixed so I suggested a few things.

Thanks for sharing.


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Review of My cat Helga  
Review by ~SilverMoon~
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Light in Mind,

I just read your story about Helga. It was such fun to read about your family's experience with your highness. :*)

Several things in this had me smiling and laughing too.

I didn't see any errors if there were any. I was too engrossed in Helga's antics.

The name Barkie surely fits for the neighbor dog. Haha.

The bed thing sounds about right. My Yorkies used to sleep all over the bed. I had several. I was literally surrounded. What was a surprise was when I was sleeping in my back and apparently my mouth was hanging open and I felt something moving inside my mouth.

Slowly I was becoming aware but not fully. There it was again. My eyes popped open and there's one of my dogs, staring me I'm the face and inspecting my tonsils with her tongue!

I sat uptight trying not to spit on anyhing. God only knows where her tongue has been. Since then I sleep in my side so I might be a bit safer. I have a pom/chi who sleeps with me now and often I'm afraid to move since it might disturb her.

Sadly, I no longer have any of my Yorkies with me. Their lives seem so short compared to ours.

Oh. I thought I was the only one that had conversations with my dog. Of course, they didn't answer any questions, but shut their eyes or looked away as if they were above such things or having a food coma.

Anyway it this story looks good, except I would break it up into paragraphs. And put a line space between them.

Thanks for sharing.


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