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OVERALL IMPRESSION and EMOTIONAL IMPACT
This emotes many positive attributes of a near rural environment and teases us with the idea that we are the sum of our experiences.

FORM, FORMAT, RHYME and METER
Free verse.

ARTISTIC VOICE and IMAGERY
Very good imagery reinforces this piece

GRAMMAR, SPELLING and MECHANICS
No errors found

SUGGESTIONS
The association between the title and the poem was a little vague to me.

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Liam

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In truth, I feel quite incompetent to be evaluated something other tha poetry, so I hope that you won't mind my experimenting with you.

This article really exemplifies the respect and devotion that you share with Aunt Dottie in your relationship. And she in kind provides the expectations of your capabilities. It portrays the very essence of symbiosis.

I enjoyed the interjection of humor provided by you husband and daughters. This really adds the expected flavor of family to the piece.

But mostly I like the reinforcement of the "pay if forward" priciple that you provided in closing.

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Liam

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OVERALL IMPRESSION and EMOTIONAL IMPACT
This evokes a somewhat anticipated emotion, I was intrigued by the symbolism of the reference to the Tower of Babel, though references to the children seem to apply to both fronts.

FORM, FORMAT, RHYME and METER
The meter does a creative little dance between anapestic and dactylic depending on whether the line is masculin or feminine and for the most part seems to be tetrameter. The need to anticipate this slightly detracts from the flow is some places.

ARTISTIC VOICE and IMAGERY
There is a strong presence of alegory in this piece as well as strong usage of symbolism

GRAMMAR, SPELLING and MECHANICS
Line 5 "bird's" should be "birds". Line 7 "targets" as contraction "target's". Line 14 "whose" perhaps "who're"

SUGGESTIONS
For me the rhyme in line 10 almost begs to be "crashes" The first two lines of stanza two need to be closer to meter to avoid the harsh shift in flow, perhaps something akin to "The birds that once peacefully flew on this route, Have altered their course from this haven of doubt." You pick the words - I'm just talking about meter.

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Liam

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OVERALL IMPRESSION and EMOTIONAL IMPACT
This poem is so powerfully emotive that it broke my heart and forced me to get up and fix a cup of coffee before trying to evaluate it. The poet has confidently revealed her voice in this work

FORM, FORMAT, RHYME and METER
Free verse. The flow is a steady excellence with a proper break in stanza to emphasize the undesired change.

ARTISTIC VOICE and IMAGERY
A strong first person voice draws the reader (audience) into the poem with a "this could be me" posture. Symbols are used with great effect, the metaphors color the grief, and the onomatopoeia grabs your collar and drags you into the second stanza.

GRAMMAR, SPELLING and MECHANICS
No error found.

SUGGESTIONS
*Note: You make reviewing a poem almost as rewarding as reading it*

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Liam

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OVERALL IMPRESSION and EMOTIONAL IMPACT
This is a powerful poetic work that celebrates the numerous attributes of this mother.

FORM, FORMAT, RHYME and METER
Free verse (not my strength). The format is the hero here. Each stanza begins with a "she is" voice that states an attribute followed by further definition. This for me especially strengthens the flow.

ARTISTIC VOICE and IMAGERY
This is where this poet's work shines. Virtually every thought within this poem utilizes some poetic device and it is all gracefully united under the personification of the rock. My favorite by far is the irony of stanza 5.

GRAMMAR, SPELLING and MECHANICS
No errors found.

SUGGESTIONS
I would suggest not changing a word - I love this one as is.

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Liam

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OVERALL IMPRESSION and EMOTIONAL IMPACT
I love this poem.It tells of the two basic roles of motherhood and shows them shared by two "mothers" separated by distance and role, each one grateful to the other for her role in their daughter's life.

FORM, FORMAT, RHYME and METER
The rhyme is q-b-c-b, and the meter though loosely folowed is primarily iambic trimeter. The flow is generally smoothe.

ARTISTIC VOICE and IMAGERY
I really enjoyed that this was wriiten in the third person, probably the rarest voice for this type of poem. It allows the poet to open with the love of the daughter to the mothers and closed with the love of the mothers to the daughter.
There is some good denotation, my favorite is "The other watched her grow."

GRAMMAR, SPELLING and MECHANICS
I saw no errors here.

SUGGESTIONS
I would consider dropping the "her" in Line 3. This would better reinforce the meter as well as stress the alliterations contained there. For me line 6 is a little cliche and conjures an inconsistent military view, but that may just be my personal experiences jumping out.

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Liam

Note: Keep in mind that any review I provide is based soley on my opinion and is not intended to take liberty with the author's work. Please use or discard any comments or suggestions as you see fit. Stanza 1 sets the story by reminding us that soldiers are a part of someone's family. Stanza 2 and 3 extends that family to all soldiers. Stanza 4 reminds us that we should remember their sacrifice and be grateful.


OVERALL IMPRESSION and EMOTIONAL IMPACT
This is a memorial to soldies who have made the ultimate sacrifice. (ANZAC in Austrailia and New Zealand is like Memorial Day in the US)

FORM, FORMAT, RHYME and METER
The meter is quite loose. The rhyme scheme is a-b-c-c.

ARTISTIC VOICE and IMAGERY
There is some interesting symbolism, which is very good, but also quite a bit of cliche used.

GRAMMAR, SPELLING and MECHANICS
Spelling errors include "widdow" to "widow", "childeren" to "children", and "remeber" to remember"

SUGGESTIONS
I understand that the message of ANZAC is well defined but poetry wants us to say this message in a new way.

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Liam

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OVERALL IMPRESSION and EMOTIONAL IMPACT
The strength of this piec is in its simplist approach to a complex subject.

FORM, FORMAT, RHYME and METER
The basic form is a dimeter but the feet dance between iambic and trochaic. Ther rhyme scheme a-b-c-b contains both masculine and feminine ends and there is great gender conformity in the rhymes.

ARTISTIC VOICE and IMAGERY
Though the voice seems quite matter-of-fact, I was intrigued by the gender shift in the first stanza, which if intended may possibly signal that these emotions are shared irrespective of gender - which is quite poetic.

GRAMMAR, SPELLING and MECHANICS
I saw no error here. But if I view the color as a mechanics - I would say that is was distracting and not consistent with the simplicity of the piece.

SUGGESTIONS
No other suggestions

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Liam

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OVERALL IMPRESSION and EMOTIONAL IMPACT
I love the poem.It is a happy song of parenhood.

FORM, FORMAT, RHYME and METER
The flow of the meter, at least as I read, is a kind of loose anapestic foot and supports the content. I did sense some rhyme mismatch between masculine and feminine rhymes tha broke the rhythm slightly.

ARTISTIC VOICE and IMAGERY
The voice is pleasant and sort of on the surface.

GRAMMAR, SPELLING and MECHANICS
I noticed no errors here

SUGGESTIONS
I think some attention to the rhyme and meter could be helpful

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Liam

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OVERALL IMPRESSION and EMOTIONAL IMPACT
I think a happy humor exists in this relationship

FORM, FORMAT, RHYME and METER
I love the format here I think it supports the conten well. Iambic Tetrameter and a-a-a-b c-c-c-b d-d-d-b e-e-e-b. Very intriguing.

ARTISTIC VOICE and IMAGERY
Great personification of the moon, as well as interesting conotations and denotations

GRAMMAR, SPELLING and MECHANICS
I saw no errors here

SUGGESTIONS
My suggestion is to continue writing poems of this caliber... I loved it!!

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Liam

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OVERALL IMPRESSION and EMOTIONAL IMPACT
The calming of the evening.

FORM, FORMAT, RHYME and METER
free verse

ARTISTIC VOICE and IMAGERY
There is a strong personification for the numerous listed characters of nature and the imagery is strengthened with metaphors.

GRAMMAR, SPELLING and MECHANICS
Though not an error, for me as a newcomer to free verse, a use of capitalization would help me greatly.

SUGGESTIONS
I like it as it is - no suggestions.

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Liam

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OVERALL IMPRESSION and EMOTIONAL IMPACT
This is a powerful piece of work that bewails the impacts of drug abuse, probably crystal meth, on the user as well his relationships.

FORM, FORMAT, RHYME and METER
Free verse

ARTISTIC VOICE and IMAGERY
Extremely good imagery, the personification of the drug is powerful, with good use of conotation a and denotation.

GRAMMAR, SPELLING and MECHANICS
I saw no spellin or punctuation errors.

SUGGESTIONS
I would suggest not changing a word!!!

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Liam

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OVERALL IMPRESSION and EMOTIONAL IMPACT
I'm a little lost on this one. I sense from the opening lines that I should feel the young man is an innocent victim - but it immediately follows that his previous actions are suspect as well. So now I see him more as naive than innocent. I'm a little unclear about the favor - was he asked to to steal the money. It would not be likely that someone else stole the money and gave it to him. My greatest difficulty though, is that after aprehended and incarcerated the young man screams "Why me?" Based on all of the above, the emotion evoked on me is concern about the moral decay within todays society and not accepting the resposibility for our own actions.

FORM, FORMAT, RHYME and METER
Free verse

ARTISTIC VOICE and IMAGERY
The concept is deep and the language is surface.

GRAMMAR, SPELLING and MECHANICS
No spelling or punctuation errors noticed.

SUGGESTIONS
No suggestions

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Liam

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OVERALL IMPRESSION and EMOTIONAL IMPACT
There appears to be a prallelism between the author/mate and the mate/cat that evokes a genuine calm to this piece. I liked that about it.

FORM, FORMAT, RHYME and METER
The flow was a little difficult for me but perhaps only due to some small spelling or word ommisions that tended to break it up. (see below)

ARTISTIC VOICE and IMAGERY
Good imagery.

GRAMMAR, SPELLING and MECHANICS
Line 3 - spelling through
Line 5 - may have a word ommited
Line 11 - spelling off

SUGGESTIONS
No further suggestions. It's just fine

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Liam

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Hello Itchy, I noticed this poem and wanted to read it.

OVERALL IMPRESSION and EMOTIONAL IMPACT
I enjoyed reading this. It made me consider similar feelings that I've experienced.

FORM, FORMAT, RHYME and METER
Each stanza seems to open well and blossoms out to exemplify its role in the poem. I think it flows well

ARTISTIC VOICE and IMAGERY
I sense a voice of indifference as if the author feels almost removed from this relationship.

GRAMMAR, SPELLING and MECHANICS
I only notice one grammarical fault. In stanza 2 line 1 there is a disagreement of verb tense. Potential correction may include "I manage" or "I've managed"

SUGGESTIONS
I would like to see the author focus on using some addition poetic devices - maybe some connotation or metaphors to support this theme.


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Liam