A Muse Masters Micro Review
The opinions contained in this review are only those of one person. Take what you can use, but don't be shy about discarding what you cannot.

Hello Myra Livingston ,

It is my pleasure to review
"Time Through a Heart" 
in affiliation with "Showering Acts of Joy Group" 

I thought I would drop by your port and see some additional samples of recently written poetry. What a pleasant surprise to come across this item. I absolutely loved it!

Note: Keep in mind that any review I provide is based soley on my opinion and is not intended to take liberty with the author's work. Please use or discard any comments or suggestions as you see fit.


OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is a rare treat for the reader. For me, it is a very humerous pespective of the one-sided love affair, that combine the attitudes of "too little - too late" and " if you snooze - you lose".

The content is fresh and compelling; and is presented very creatively. It is also perfectly balanced - with the first half presenting the "conflict" and the second half presenting the "resolution".

The (4-3, 4-3) meter and (a-b-c-b) rhyme scheme are the perfect choice for this kind of poem, as it is very sing-songy, and perpetuates the active participation of the reader's involvement. I could actually see this joker trying to sell his "bill of goods" - and hear the "wheels turning" as the poet contemplated this little dance routine.

SUGGESTIONS:
It is beyond me to offer any constructive benefit. Some poetic reviewers place a high priority on punctuation - I personally view it as an option to the poet. (just an observance)

POETIC DEVICES:
I love it when the poets word selection can create a sort of "implied imagery" without actually having to "paint the image." Let me cite an example: Line one, "Ten years later he comes to me", as I read this aloud I can actually see the poet standing there with her arms crossed - tapping her foot. It's an absolutely perfect beginning and sets the tone precisely.

While the focus of the tone shifts with the onset of the resolution in Stanza three - Line three, "As a kid I might have bought it", the continuity of this "suggested imagery" maintains from beginning to end. WHAT A TREAT!!

WHAT I LIKED BEST:
It's not very easy to pick favorite lines when you come across a poem of this caliber because in truth nearly every line has merit. But that said, I will note a very special treat of internal rhyme in Line two of stanza four, "Through eyes made wise by age"

Rating:

Thank you for sharing,
Liam

Hello Phourous ,

It is my pleasure to review
"Transparent Pages" 
in affiliation with "Showering Acts of Joy Group" 

I really enjoy how a poet expresses the ordinary so extraordinarily. That's why I enjoyed reading your poem, and I have the following comments to offer:

Note: Keep in mind that any review I provide is based soley on my opinion and is not intended to take liberty with the author's work. Please use or discard any comments or suggestions as you see fit.


OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem really voices the anguish of a broken family and certainly brought a tear to my eye. The title is very good and supports the content. It begins very powerfully and maintains through the end.

SUGGESTIONS:
The one change I would recommend is the punctuation in line one and two of stanza two, "Divided now a family, in pangs of turmoil.". I would prefer that as "Divided, now a family in pangs of turmoil,"

WHAT I LIKED BEST:
My favorite two lines are the powerful beginning - "Hide me from the world, from the pain I feel,"

Rating:

Thank you for sharing,
Liam

Hello ,

It is my pleasure to review
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in affiliation with "Showering Acts of Joy Group" 

I really enjoy how a poet expresses the ordinary so extraordinarily. That's why I enjoyed reading your poem, and I have the following comments to offer:

Note: Keep in mind that any review I provide is based soley on my opinion and is not intended to take liberty with the author's work. Please use or discard any comments or suggestions as you see fit.


OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This is a unique perspective of the annual pilgrimage to find the perfect yuletide symbol, and portrays the trek vividly, as well as the pilgim's thoughts as he struggles through the snow in search of his prize.

The imagery is excellent, which contains samples of visual, audible, olfactory and tactile, works well to set up the poet's question of Nature's intention. While it is light spirited, straddling humor, it is not frivilous.

SUGGESTIONS:
For me, the flow is a bit erratic. While each line or two reads pretty smoothly, the transition to subsequent lines is sometimes a little choppy. So it gives the poem a little "stop and go" kind of flow.

POETIC DEVICES:
Here the poet shows a real mastery in his usage of the poetic elements with great examples of simile, metaphor, personification, metonymy and hyperbole. Additionally, there are numerous examples of assonance, consonance and alliteration.

WHAT I LIKED BEST:
I definitely enjoyed the imagery of this poem. I really felt like I was there battling the winter abuse. My favorite word play was "nature's unfeigned sincerity", a sort of double emphatic, like "the real reality".

Even with the difficut flow, this is a very enjoyable read that prompts remembrance of similar experiences.

Rating:

Thank you for sharing,
Liam