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I try to find the WOW-factor in your writing. No in-depth analysis, just my thoughts. #19 PR June 2016. #29 PR July 2016. #10 PR August 2016. Newbies Academy Reviewing Classroom, Winner June 2016. First Place The Newbie Academy Review Contest June 2016. Second Place "The Newbie Academy Review Contest " July and Aug 2016. #9 PR Sept 2016.#20 PR Oct 2016. First place "The Newbie Academy Review Contest" November 2016.#22 PR Nov 2016.#36 PR Feb 2017.#67 PR March 2017.#56 PR July 2017.#41 PR Aug 2017. #77 PR Oct 2017. #53 PR Nov 2017. #53 PR Dec 2017.#96 PR Sept 2018. #38 PR Aug 2020.#26 PR Sept 2020. #56 PR Oct 2020. #80 PR Nov 2020.#76 PR Aug 2021. #47 PR Sept 2021. #69 PR June 2023.#53 PR July 2023. #45 PR Nov 2023.
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short stories, some poetry
I will not review...
reads > 2000 words
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Review of My Mind's Recess  
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In affiliation with The Poet's Place  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, strlcuckoo ,

I yet again found this poem by your own request. A poem about memories throughout life. Why do we remember them? They profoundly impact the boy and the man later in life.

Deep within the recess of my mind.

You keep repeating this beautiful and strong line over and over, like a mantra. It creates a very nice atmosphere that ties up the poem as a whole. I loved this poem and think that you are a true poet indeed.

Thank you for sharing, keep on writing poetry.

WakeUpAndLive️~🚬🚭2024


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Review of The Wind  
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In affiliation with The Poet's Place  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Review by WakeUpAndLive


Hi, strlcuckoo ,

I found this little gem of a poem by your own request and I am glad I did. A lovely romantic love poem, small, sweet and quiet. That's how I read it anyway.

The tale can be interpreted as a little bit sad, two lovers unaware of each other, apart from each other, reminiscing and feeling blue. But also you can read it as hopeful, they love each other and there is really no need for tears. Or perhaps happy ones, that would be good also.

There is a calmness in your writing that I really enjoy. The pace and rhythm are good, and there is some end rhyme.

One thing I noticed for your consideration: I would leave the word "for" in the end sentence of the first stanza. That way the candance won't be interrupted. But that's personal.

A very sweet nicely written poem. I loved it. Thanks for sharing and keep writing.

WakeUpAndLive️~🚬🚭2024


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Review of Brown Eyes  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Review by WakeUpAndLive


Hi, strlcuckoo ,

I found this beautiful poem at your own request and I am glad I did.

What a sweet, simple but eloquent verse, I really loved it. Reading, or speaking out loud reveals the uniqueness of this poem. It has a warm flow, a good pace and an intimate nature.

An ode at the brown eyes of your love, what is there not to like!

4 stanzas and each one of them tells a strong tail. I personally find the second stanza very powerful: There are beautiful/ Beautiful blue eyes/ But those that are brown/ Make my heart rate rise

There are a few things I want you to look at:

* There are beautiful; consider They are beautiful (second stanza)
* My heart; consider my heart (fourth stanza)
* So long as I live; consider As long as I live (fourth stanza)

Really, a very sympathetic love poem, thank you for sharing.

Keep on writing,

WakeUpAndLive️~🚬🚭2024


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Review by
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi, Enby_Liz ,

I found your first chapter because you asked me to review it.

This is just the thought of one person, bear that in mind. I hope you are not offended but I couldn't make head or tails of this first chapter.

You jump into a new world without any explanation, it's very hard for me as a reader to understand where I am in the story, who this main character is, and what the story is all about. In order to understand any of this perhaps you should create a prologue before this first chapter begins. That way you can explain the world-building of this fantasy. I understand this is only the first chapter, but chapters must have the capability to stand on their own.

*First of all: The thoughts of the main character must be in Italics to distinguish them.
*"...my muscles , pack it in...
*Please choose one tense throughout the story, now you jump from past to present and back.
*The sentence..."I just thought it would look nice, that's all"...what is that all about?

All in all, I didn't understand what I was reading. With a few adjustments you can change that, perhaps. I hope you will because you put a lot of effort in this chapter as you told so it's worth the try to make it more understandable so people can relate.

Thanks for sharing, keep on writing.

WakeUpAndLive️~🚬🚭2024


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Review by
Rated: E | (5.0)
What a super cute feature is this, The StoryMaster . I hope I can get this review out in good order. Because I really want that trinket. I want to thank you again for an awesome feature. You are a wizard. This Automatic Review Response is really fun, I hope.

Thank you, WakeUpAndLive️~🚬🚭2024
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Review by
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi, The Puppet Master ,

I found your story at your own request.

An interesting supernatural story with a twist. I liked it a lot and think it has great potential to be an even better story. Because there were a few things that bothered me while reading this tale about Violet with a crush on Stan, her supervisor. She is killed in a car crash and keeps haunting Stan. With the help of a Pastor the story has a happy ending.

First of all something to do with writing techniques, namely your choice of Point of View. The POVs in this story keep shifting from Violet to Stan, back to Violet, to Stan, to Pastor Quinn and back to Violet. It is kind of muddy and distracting from the content of the story. If you don't choose an omniscent POV but want to shift your point of view during the course of the story perhaps you can make changes in the layout of the story? Either by making different paragraphs, adding blank lines in between or start the new sentence with 4 capital words so the reader is aware there is something shifting. Just a thought!

The other thing that kept distracting me from the content was the psychology of two of the characters, namely Violet's and Pastor Quinn's.

Violet has a crush on Stan, that's what you want me to believe. But the crush has to be bigger and deeper than I can read now in your story. Her passion is so great that she haunts him after death. That's huge. It would be more believable if you added some of that passion before she died so it would be more believable she would haunt him after death.

The other character Pastor Quinn has to be believable so he would do a sort of reversed exorcism, instead of taking the spirit out of a body, putting the spirit into a body (of an animal). Perhaps you can add something more to his thought process that will explain why he believes in ghosts and reversed exorcism?

Anyway, those were the distracting thoughts that kept me from diving into the story. And this story deserves to be told because it is an interesting one.

Although it's only one opinion of one reader I hope you will consider these remarks.

Thanks for sharing, keep on writing,

WakeUpAndLive️~🚬🚭2024


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Review by
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Peremos ,

I found this gem of a prose vignette at your own request. And I am so glad I got the chance to read and review this beautiful piece. It's a profound write about hope in difficult times, fighting the difficult battles there are.

In this day and age, I immediately had to think about the brave battle for democracy that Ukraine is fighting against Russia. I am from the Netherlands, Europe, so the borders of Ukraine are only a few hundred kilometers from my home. They are in a devastating battle against evil and can use all the hope and resilience mentioned in your write.

I found no faults or grammar errors, the flow was excellent and I loved your beautiful strong use of words. A very good read!

Thank you for sharing,

WakeUpAndLive️~🚬🚭2024


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Review of On The Write Path  
for entry "Ides of August " 
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Kåre Enga in Udon Thani ,

Thank you for entering "Vagrant Vignettes"  [E].

The sight, smell, taste, and sound of a day in Thailand. A beautiful vignette. I am thrilled you wrote it, just because! And well in time, I am so glad!

Good luck in the competition.

WakeUpAndLive️~🚬🚭2024


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Review of Adjacent to Fame  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi, Elisa the Bunny Stik ,

Thank you for entering "Vagrant Vignettes"  [E].

A vignette about a train trip from Chicago to Savannah with a friend. Bunking with roommates, eating dinner. Talking. The rhythm of the train through the landscape.

Good luck in the competition.

WakeUpAndLive️~🚬🚭2024


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Review of Five Women  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, QueenNormaJeanGreeneggs&vegham ,

Thank you for entering "Vagrant Vignettes"  [E].

A journey of five Native American women with beautiful names in their quest for a new land and new horizon. The casual meet with a man. A nice vignette.

Good luck in the competition.

WakeUpAndLive️~🚬🚭2024


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Review by
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Sumojo ,

Thank you for entering "Vagrant Vignettes"  [E].

A drive into the country, the meeting with cows and the encounter with them. A nice vignette. I love cows! They are the most peaceful animals. But you don't want them chasing you!

Good luck in the competition.

WakeUpAndLive️~🚬🚭2024


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Review of The Photograph  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Beholden ,

Thank you for entering "Vagrant Vignettes"  [E].

A walk in the woods, the noticing of a tree, the taking of a photograph. A beautiful vignette. Your description placed me in that time frame.

Good luck in the competition.

WakeUpAndLive️~🚬🚭2024


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Review by
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Slight ,

Thank you for entering "Vagrant Vignettes"  [E].

A beautiful vignette about the mesmerizing words of an alchemist about an apple. I could see it, almost taste it. The power of words.

Good luck in the competition.

WakeUpAndLive️~🚬🚭2024


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Review of The Long Walk  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Dave Ryan ,

Thanks for entering "Vagrant Vignettes"  [E].

A vignette about a young man entering the corsetry section of a warehouse, dreading to ask for help buying women's underwear but plunging into the deep to ask help anyway. Walking the long walk toward salvation.

Good luck in the competition.

WakeUpAndLive️~🚬🚭2024


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Review of How?  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi, Spring in my Sox ,

Thanks for entering "Vagrant Vignettes"  [E].

The first paragraph reminded me of a book by Albert Camus about the heat of the sun. After that it's all about Armaggedon. A beautifully written, but spooky tale in the light of recent developments in Oekraine and Russia. Very frightful!

Good luck in the competition.

WakeUpAndLive️~🚬🚭2024


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Review of The Bologna Blog  
for entry "A Prince of a Man" 
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hi, L.A. Grawitch ,

Found this story in your blog as a search for Anniversary reviews. Happy Anniversary.

Because it is a story in your blog, I assumed, while starting to read that you were describing an ordinary day in your real life! *Ha* What a surprise when it came to the abuse and ultimately kill of the husband, I suspected it was a short fiction piece.

I am so glad, I wouldn't have wanted this to be real, for you and the kids.

But, phew, it is fiction. And a good story at that.

I liked the casual style, the flow of your words, and the content. Good riddance and what a Prince indeed, your Harry the garbage man. And also a good police officer toward the end.

A good story that I liked reading.
Thanks for sharing,
WakeUpAndLive️~🚬🚭2024


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Review of On The Write Path  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Kåre Enga in Udon Thani ,

I am so sorry I closed the contest half way through the day, instead of at midnight.

Thank you for writing the personal essay. I will send an MB for your trouble!

Next time I will make notice of the exact time of closing to avoid misunderstanding.

WakeUpAndLive️~🚬🚭2024


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Jaeff | KBtW of the Free Folk ,

Thank you for entering "Personal Essay Contest"  [E].

You are thinking of decluttering your house. And before you do so you watch episodes of Hoarders on television. It gives you courage to proceed with the task at hand. Very inventive.

Good luck in the competition.

WakeUpAndLive️~🚬🚭2024


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Review of The Graduate  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi, winklett in the woods ,

Thank you for entering "Personal Essay Contest"  [E].

A lovely and warm story about your son Jonah's world with autism. It must be difficult at times to deal with the challenges, but so rewarding when dealing with an excellent school.

Good luck in the competition.

WakeUpAndLive️~🚬🚭2024


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Review of The Wallet  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, tracker ,

Thank you for entering "Personal Essay Contest"  [E]

A friendship, a roadtrip to get home and loosing a wallet with cash. Ingredients of your story. Luckily the main character walks into a diner with the sweetest waitress. She can go on her merry way!

Good luck in the competition.

WakeUpAndLive️~🚬🚭2024


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Review of Why do I write?  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Khola Mousethyme ,

Thank you for entering "Personal Essay Contest"  [E].

You are a true writer! Struggling with the reasons why to write and coming up with the best of reasons why not to. Because you need to write, you simply cannot NOT write.

I hope you continue for a long time.

Good luck in the competition.

WakeUpAndLive️~🚬🚭2024


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, JCosmos ,

Thank you for entering "Personal Essay Contest"  [E].

Korea in the 60 ties and 70 ties of the last century. A teacher who has to avoid being teargassed in demonstrations and who's taking his class to Burger King to discuss and talk English.

I bet you were a hell of a teacher.

Good luck in the competition.

WakeUpAndLive️~🚬🚭2024 .


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Review by
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Elisa the Bunny Stik .

Thank you for entering "Personal Essay Contest"  [E].

What a great idea to have another tattoo, the Blue Jay this time, and on the very spot of the COVID vaccinations. Interesting choice. When nicely done I like tattoos a lot, not on myself though... too scared, of the pain, the hassle, etc. But... good for you.

Enjoy your trip to Europe, thanks for sharing.

Good luck in the competition.

WakeUpAndLive️~🚬🚭2024


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Elska Hugrekki ,

Thank you for entering "Personal Essay Contest"  [E].

A lovely warm encounter with your mom, reminiscing over old photos, memories, and life itself. Moments of joy, gratitude, laughter, and the occasional tear. What could be better? Writing about it is a way to preserve it.

Good luck in the competition.

WakeUpAndLive️~🚬🚭2024


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Review of That's a Laugh!  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi, Jay O'Toole ,

Your WdC Anniversary is coming up so I decided to review one of your stories as I never reviewed one.

I really liked your monologue as you definitely have a funny bone. It's good clean fun in this introduction as a stand-up comedian. Perhaps it wasn't supposed to be stand-up, as you are sitting down in the photo *Ha* but you should consider this. A man of the cloth to be funny on a stage, it's new to me and I liked it. But I realized that you perhaps are merely a devoted Christian. In that case, I was biased to think you were a preacher.

Anyway, this I liked. It was funny with word games, and memories and it was funny in a really nice way. I had to smile while reading it, you made my Sunday.

Thanks for sharing, and have a good anniversary on the 14th.

WakeUpAndLive️~🚬🚭2024


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