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I like to give fair and honest reviews. I will always be polite and will give some tips if needed. Improper grammar in a story is something that bothers me quite a bit and, please, if you absolutely need to swear in your story try to keep it at a minimum and make it part of a character and not a narrative.
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fantasy.
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Review of Gate 11A  
Review by Tickler Rhyme
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
I feel it's only fair that I begin this with a confession. I was hesitant to go through with a review for this after reading it; not because it's poorly written but because the subject of it weighed on me uncomfortably. That being said, aside from a few punctuation and grammatical things I would have tweaked as the writer, I think that this is a great short story. I personally found the subject and character a bit too strong and heavy but that definitely isn't a bad thing. There are plenty of stories out there that make people feel uncomfortable that everyone loves to read or hear and we don't know why. My only real problem is that it felt unfinished but should be easy to complete some time down the road. My best suggestion for you would be to send a request for this to someone who cares more about punctuation than I do and get some advice from them before finishing this off. There's a lot of potential that I'd like to see brought out with this piece.
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