Hi,
A review.:revision,with a view to improvement.
An excercise for you.This what you can expect.
Comma placement:(in order)
...evening,when...belt,...rubber,...wander,...mind,...tread,...words,...reason,...radio,...station,...word,...body,...
coming,...bed,...sentences,...chair,
Spelling:pieces
Tense:came to an end,
Word change:normal/usual shower.
Drop:...words coming,I felt....(than-out)
If you can,print your writing,add changes,then read.See if you agree.
If anything is not clear,please contact.
The actual story.......so much like my own,
only I walk behind a herd of cows,inspirational.
Words,ideas,thoughts rushing in.When I get home,sit down and ...........gone!!!!
Regards
RICH,j2rr
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