Hi Storm Machine,

I found this piece via the random review button and was excited to get a piece of fantasy to read as it's one of my favourite genres. Below you can read about my impression of the story, but it's only my opinion, so please feel free to disregard anything that isn't helpful to your progress as a writer.

Overall impression
I liked the depth of this piece. Even though it's quite short there are hints of a greater story and a whole magic system behind, and you even managed to fit in a couple of unexpected twists.

I have to admit I didn't totally understand the part about the sister. Does it mean that Genya's sister wished to become a fairy, which resulted in her death? Or did she die beforehand? I assume she then went back to haunt Genya, waiting to grant the wish? That creates a wonderfully dramatic situation, but the fairy's response to Genya's pain at the end didn't seem quite appropriate if she used to be Genya's sister.


Characters
You gave us quite a good picture of Genya through the description of her activities seen through the fairy's eyes and the dialogue.
I also liked your slow introduction of the narrator. We don't realise that she's a fairy until the wings are mentioned, but notice is something a little unusual from the beginning, with the mentions of the trash can and leaving goodies. Later in the story we learn that she used to be human, so I have to say the part about "horrible human habits" didn't quite ring true for me, since it's something she must have once (and not all that long ago is she's the sister) shared. Her attitude towards being a fairy is also not quite consistent since she describes it as a "mistake" at one point, but then later gloats about being immortal. I think the story would be improved if you tighten up a couple of parts to make the character of the narrator strong and consistent.


Language aspects
Your language was generally great and I didn't notice any mistakes.
The only thing I would point out is your use of the phrase "gloss over", which bothered me a little. My understanding of the phrase is that it means to cover up a mistake by whitewashing it, or presenting it in a more favourable light. The sentence where you used it:
"I'd watched Genya for too long to gloss over the good things she put in her trash can"
it seems to me like you mean it more in the sense of "ignore".

Conclusion
In conclusion, thanks very much for posting this and I look forward to reading more of your creations.

All the best!
Victoria

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .