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Rated: E · Book · Biographical · #1962252
A running blog on a real newbies adventures with the WDC website
         I became a newbie writer just starting to learn the tools of the trade.  Silly me thinking, I could just jump right in, and start swimming, with what I remember of my six grade English.  After all what use did a professional computer repair person need of grammar, to fill in blanks, dot “I’s”, or cross his “T’s” with.  I was forced into early retirement.  Because of Agent Orange encounters from Vietnam, and a bad hernia repair.

         You cannot learn anything being a mugwump. What is a mugwump you say? It is a person sitting on a fence; with their mug on one side of the fence, and their wump on the other side. One day I received this interesting email from the Newbie Academy Group. They recommend I engage in contest activities.  I thought to myself why not!  I went to the contest list and found the writer’s cramp contest. At the prompt: here's a new restaurant in town with an interesting theme. What's the theme, how is it expressed, and how's the food?

         I read this and get all excited.  I started thinking of all the Chief Gordon Ramsey shows I had watch with my wife.  Out of nowhere pops a memory of a silly menu I had in my funny joke collection.  It was a road kill menu for Uncle Roberts fine cuisine dinning.  I decided to use my hillbilly name.  I and my wife had a moment in our newly married life, when we were teasing a neighbor friend.  We started calling our redneck friend Deny-Bob.  He called us JoVonna-Bob and Brett-Bob.

         I decided to call my contest entry “Brett-Bob’s Road Kill Express” to me the whole idea was a joke and after all what a great thing to write about.  To me the trick was to keep it rated ‘E’ as this was a requirement of the contest.  I had in my mind decided to keep it as a fake road kill diner they would serve real food as fake road kill using the out of season as the excuse to use their specialty dishes for them.

         When I wrote it as with all my writing I am becoming world famous for run-ons and miss spelling.  Part of the problem is MSoffice I blame its terrible spell checker, and the horrible grammar checker, since it cannot even do second grade error correction.  Like I told one of the Newbie Academy Ladies I’m a senior citizen writing as a first grader.  And even a first grader has trouble reading my work let alone the poor teacher. Beside whom else can I blame?  None of us want to point that finger at ourselves.  We might get ashamed and do something about it.

         One of the funnier parts to my story is I didn’t read it had a thousand word limit.  I just assumed that they wanted whatever you could produce in a short time. Just like Nanowrimo.  It had a twenty four hour dead line.  I figured you didn’t need to worry, if it was a rough draft, or a finished work.  This was probably my misreading of the contest rules.  I’m betting the judge expects to judge finished works by more experienced authors other than newbies.

         Basically I’m trying to say, I set myself up for failure.  But the best part of the story, and funniest is the judge’s comment: “You met that goal with an interesting piece. However, since I'm a vegetarian, it was unhappily a bit unappetizing in both humor and description. Sigh.”

         I know I thrive on rejection.  But my very first contest. When I am trying to fit in, and receive that comment.  It was about the funniest thing to happen to me.  Being a new writer I understand not everything I write is golden or is going to make me incredibly rich either.  I did install the sense of shame.  I went visiting my email and asked the kind judge for help with run-ons.  She took pity on me and provided a link to myenglishteacher.net.  She also recommended a class from WDC’s own recommended school.  She also recommended asking for help in my groups forums.

         The truth is I really don’t see even the kindest writer here, having the time to teach me sixth grade again.  Then I realized I don’t need the whole lessen.  I just need to learn to recognize what I do in my writing, and fix that issue.  As I write I can auto correct instead or totally relearning English.  So I went to some of the forums in the Newbie Academy Group. 
Since I have no life anymore I sometimes expect the same of everyone else.  But the sad truth is it’s the week end, and all the nice people are out being nice people.  I am going to have to wait until Monday to get my help.

         My contest entry received eight reviews; of the eight, two actually showed me areas to improve it, and of course one judge’s review.  I think the poor lady felt sorry for me and I got the newbie prize of 250 gp with the review or it won third place.  I in my vanity like the third place idea; the truth is I’m just guessing.

         I hope I haven’t offended any one with this story. It is another attempt at a funny story.  I don’t have any hard feelings with the judge she was honest, truthful, and even extremely helpful.  Some points of interest; only one person didn’t find it funny, the judge. Only the judge and one retired teacher gave me a link. They both gave me really helpful reviews with writing style help.  I am still holding on to three reviews of the eight.  I still get a laugh every time I read the third email.  I just love her closing line: This story is fun, and I still have a silly smirk on my face.

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April 2, 2014 at 2:57pm
April 2, 2014 at 2:57pm
#812233
I have been playing in my blog, doing e-mail, even did one review, and I keep hearing this strange noise from my monitor. It has this really strange grunting sound. Finally I got worried it might have something going bad in it. So I clear off my work space so I can pull it out and work on it. And what to my wondering eyes does appeared but an old female pure gray kitty cat snoring. I never felt so relieved in my life that all I have to do is ignore my "snoring" monitor.
March 30, 2014 at 10:04am
March 30, 2014 at 10:04am
#811773
         I opened my e-mail today and got the funniest surprise yet:

G. B. Williams has reviewed {item:} | Edit

Thanks for sharing your PDG guide on reviewing stories. It was helpful, and I will be using it in some form as I continue to review short stories. I particularly liked your statement on what kinds of items you review and complement to writer.

Suggestions/questions/comments: Hi there ! (there!)

"Gasp!" your (you're) being reviewed by a newbie!

Again, thanks for sharing and write on. WRITE ON!

[Preferred Author [#4000] Officially approved Writing.Com Preferred Author logo.]

*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .

         I had forgotten I even left a copy of my first review form in my port. I have since deleted the old out dated thing. I don't think I even used it very much to begin with. I had it stuck there because I used a static form to build it with before I transferred it to the review tool. Here is a copy of my real form I use.

Dear ,
I am reviewing your {item:} {entry:}. These are my observations about your work.

"Offering quality helpful reviews in a positive and encouraging manner."


*BulletB* General Comments & Reader Reaction *CheckB*
*BulletB* Plot & Pace *CheckB*
*BulletB* Characters *CheckB*
*BulletB* Setting & Imagery *CheckB*
*BulletB* Themes *CheckB*
*BulletB* Emotion, Mood & Atmosphere *CheckB*
*BulletB* Structure & Consistency *CheckB*
*BulletB* Writing Style & Grammar *CheckB*
*BulletB* Favorite Lines *CheckB*
*BulletB* Overall Impression & Conclusion: *CheckB*

*Exclaim* Please remember that you are best judge of what is right for your book *Exclaim* Whatever another person says -- especially me *Exclaim* -- whether positive or negative, is just their opinion *Exclaim* You are the only one who can decide what is right for your Book. *Exclaim*

Thanks for sharing this item! I only review things that I enjoy reading and I truly did enjoy reading this chapter. Please keep on writing more things just like this!

You have been reviewed by a proud newbie member of the P.E.N.C.I.L. Group.


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March 25, 2014 at 4:16pm
March 25, 2014 at 4:16pm
#811286
The Newbie Corner


Playing With Emoticons

         Today I would like to talk about using ML code for enhancing your review forms or your blog. We all have seen the thumbs up and the big smiley face. there is two tricks to it. Trick # one: If you know the name to it you go {e:bigsmile} *Bigsmile*. Now when you type in {e: it will bring up a list as you spell out what think it might be the list changes and gets closer or further away depending on spelling.

         Trick #two: You look above your blog entry your working on and click the little yellow smiley face that says emoticons. The one {e:smirk} {e:smirk} or ((e:FacePalm}} *FacePalm* . It brings up the master listing of all the emoticons and you can hunt through it for the one you want. When you click on the one you want it will show you the ML code for it. I just copy and paste it where I want it. Or just type it in, all emoticons will start with {e: I use this the most when working on review forms or I get bored with plain text in my blog. you can make a train for an ellipses in your text or use the colored squares. You have at your finger tips all this sites emoticons at your beck and call.

         The next handy thing is the question mark right next to the yellow smiley face. This is the master listing of all the writing ML code we use for anything. The next few lessons I will do will be on the commands in here and how to get creative with them. Remember if you want or need extra help with any of the examples I have shown you. Please feel free to e-mail me The Run-on King PDG Member Some examples of the fun you can have: *Blush**Cool**Inlove*

Brett
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March 23, 2014 at 12:22pm
March 23, 2014 at 12:22pm
#811009
         Today as I sat down to do my weekly commitment once upon a blog. I realized I forgot to visit the weekly goals and submit my resulting goals. The Story Mistress is getting such participation the finding my Monday's entrance is becoming an art in searching. Soon to be come a lost art. I used to have this wonderful form in my word docs. Until I was forced to wipe my hard drive clean. Now that I'm back online I my folders are blank At least I still have all my writing and such here.

          Some of the most amusing things have happened to me on this sit when I designed my first contest I got two pieces of the free clip art from the internet rated five star. I found that pretty funny. I never complained about it. Most of my newbie stories were either a three or a three point five star rating.(the truth is some were a one some were a two and some were a four), but rated at a three. It was at that point I finally figured out that this mysterious rater was rating titles not the actual work.

         When I was hot and heavy into reviewing the newbies that title rater was actually hurting our poor newbies. For an example Elfindragon who is an excellent writer and a very nice Lady. Had a four point five star story rated at a two stars. Even the title wasn't bad it drew me into reviewing it. But the frosting on the cake was I had started a story for Elle's "Roots and Wings"contest. I was trying to win one of those new badges that I helped them get. After all it is beautiful and they needed the funding. So I had two pictures of really old steam tractors. (Steam punk lol). With two paragraphs as my b-item holder the rest of it was in my wiped out hard drive. Wouldn't you know it this mysterious title rater comes and rates my work in progress to a one point five.

         I want you all to know there is a twist to this story I did a lot of historical research to write it. The story back ground is about a California farmer buying two tractors from a certain company. Working his fields until he buries one tractor and getting the other one stuck as well. He goes back to the maker for help. They use their new prototype as a field test, and it successfully pulls out the two tractors. It hauls them both to the barn for repairs. The point of it all is this was the beginning of the Caterpillar road working company. The fact that this story partly made the decision to start making tracked vehicles and tractors which did prove useful in WWI. Now you get an idea of why I don't like this mysterious title rater. The really sad part is loosing all my references and links to that research.

         One of the reasons I have never said much was they were part of the reason that our newbies stay. We get this false sense of being liked by the writers here on the site and our work isn't so bad after all we start peeking out of our hiding places to explore. Then once we enter contests and people like the judges of the contests give them a review that is not only helpful but is done in such a nice way you can except it and go work on your story. You realize that the title rater has given you the self confidence to find out just how truly bad you really are in a nice way.

         I believe I saw that really funny tale about the rater who rated the Story Master's place holder. And here I thought reviewing pictures was funny. But reviewing a work in progress. I'm too much of a curious person to do that. I want to review it after the author finishes it first personally. It looks more like an act of revenge then a random act of stupidity. Makes one wonder who's bowl of cheerios did I urinate in. After all I wasn't exact Mr wonderful to everyone starting out I know a few times I was blunt honest using a little bit of psychology to snap them out of their childhood to the reality that if you really want to get published then change your sloppy ways. Oops! So I can see I'm still dealing with an emotional child. Oh well no big deal take a number join the the line, but I must warn you my children are all ready first inline. All thirty of them including grand kids. So have patients I'll get to you, and when I do to the wood shed we will go.



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March 21, 2014 at 2:05pm
March 21, 2014 at 2:05pm
#810832
         For the past few weeks I thought I was receiving prank calls about this time every morning I would get this call, "Hello", a click then "This-phone-cbgay." It would repeat it and repeat it for about thirty to forty seconds then hang up. I got tired of this call everyday. I called my land line provider and got the harassment phone number. I called it and found out that the number was from an old insurance company.

         I called the number again this time I actually got a ring and an agent. I explained to him that I had been getting this harassing phone call for over a month and I was tired of it. I first made sure it wasn't a surprise debt collector for me. They had no account for me either by name or social. I then explained to them if it doesn't stop. Since It sounded like a terrorist cell activation code to me I was going to report this suspicious activity to the NSA and Homeland Security and let them tell it to the judge. I also explained that being a writer i had an over active imagination and they wouldn't like me expressing my duress over being scared of terrorist coming for me and so on. You can image the scene I painted in that reps mind. Needless to say I was instantly removed from that list. and promised no more phone calls from his company.

         I found this extremely funny and what a great movie idea to boot if anyone wants to use it please feel free. I'm into Sci-fi and Fantasy so knock yourself out. I really don't write Tom Clancy stuff like this would be.


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March 17, 2014 at 11:05am
March 17, 2014 at 11:05am
#810420
Disaster


         On Tuesday everything was going fine then on Wednesday morning when I turned on my screens and all I could see was gibberish and my computer had rebooted. So I shut it down waited a few minutes and fired it back up only to get gibberish on my screens. You ever tried to log in with a foreign language? Well now you know my problem. Nothing worked no internet so I shut done and tried to repair it. Oops big mistake there. I spent two days finding out nothing was going to work. On the third day I pull out my back up drive removed my oldest cdrom drive, they do go bad.

         Next I removed my video card and that newest stick of ram. Now I finally got windows to reinstall. Now the main problem is that onboard video card will not do two monitors. Man, I am hating this already. I find out the original mother board cd cannot load in the video driver correctly and my sound is crap. I finally remember on the Flash drive I have downloaded the LAN card drivers as an update. I plug in the drive install the drivers, and bingo I now have internet going.

         I fire up my old back up computer an old Compaq I finally get it and online when I discover the mouse triple clicks and is moving all over the place so fast you cannot find the cursor half the time. Now it looks like the computer is haunted. I am slowly able to e-mail my important people to let them know what happened. I had started working on a new story Tuesday for The Roots and Wings contest I’m trying to earn that badge I helped them get. I get the honor of a mysterious Rater that rates this incomplete work as a 1.5. Gee I wonder why?

         You know as a newbie and I take great pride in being a WDC newbie. I used to love the fact someone took the time to give my really bad run-on stories a 3 or 3.5. You know what an ego boost that is. But it wasn’t helping me win contests or even get going on the site. After the Newbie Academy took me under their wings started showing me how to build my review forms. They challenged me to do reviewing. I really got started now I am starting to write a lot better. I can do in depth novel reviews and write a small column in the blog city newsletter.

         I guess I’m just going to have to continue to do all my contest work off line or as private to stop the port reviewing on unfinished articles. The silly part is I have no idea why this even bothers me. I guess losing all my music, my pictures, and some of my writing I hadn’t backed up yet, was pretty upsetting.

         My new video card came in today thanks to Obama money. Looks like I don’t get my premium account this year. Oh well probably for the best anyway. I am hoping to get my dual screens back I could work and review so much easier with just a single screen man I got spoiled. Well off to get it all done so I can play catch up on my pencil book I am reviewing. Thank you, for being so awesome in helping and understanding.



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March 14, 2014 at 10:43am
March 14, 2014 at 10:43am
#810065
The Newbie Corner


         I have spent a lot of time playing with Writing ML trying to get my Word docs to upload correctly. I still have no clue why Writing ML cannot take my perfect looking page and recreate it exactly like I had it. No matter what I set my static or book entries at it never come across correctly.

         Earlier I showed you {Indent} and {size:3.5}{/size}. Now a faster way to undo an upload is insert the indent into your word doc. Now that I have my whole document in the body of the static item I look for the indents and hit enter on each one until I have my spacing back. If it inserted all these {Size:2} {/size} into my document I just delete them all and leave one {/size} at the bottom past the last period. Next I put a {size:3.5} at my first indent.

         I love to play around with the color and bold but it was brought to my attention that review forms you use bold to highlight your points and answers etc.. But not the whole article. I was also informed the WDC police would get me for bolding my whole article as well. You can however bold and color parts you want to stand out. How many of us when that 30 hour review the reviewer, have a heart attack keeping track of {suser:} Well I have a solution the normal entry would look like {review:3964455} {suser:gungunwarrior} Now a simpler way is to {lreviwer:3964455} Example: Review of "The Stone of Mist" The Run-on King PDG Member or Review of "The Stone of Mist" by The Run-on King PDG Member I put an "L" (I'm using this upper case one to show what to use only in lower case.) In front of review to make it work. The reason I'm showing you this is if you put the 'l' in front of any item command like {l-item:}, {l-entry:}, and {l-post}. It will list the item and create a link to it. Now you know how everyone else does it.

March 9, 2014 at 8:43am
March 9, 2014 at 8:43am
#809503
         Here I sit all befuddled. Where did my week go? What did I get done, and why didn't I get more done? As I ponder the answers to these questions I just had to ask myself did I have fun? Heck yes I had fun!

         Did I learn anything? Yes I did. What I learned is you cannot trust editors. Part of it is a lot of us are newbies when it comes to working with Writing ML. And part of it is Writing ML when your working on code and trying to give good examples. It hides your coding. Now here was my article the way is should have looked:

The Newbie Corner

         I had a brain storm once upon a time to do a column about helping newbies. I will not go into details as I thrive on rejection. You know as a newbie to anything whether it be short stories, novels or even blogging. We all are pressured to do things here. Mostly, the pressure comes from us to ourselves. We came here to get help with our stories.

         My particular case was my family and friends didn’t have the heart to tell me I was a real newbie at writing. Now how can I improve on my writing? At the time, a moderator named Sisco took an interest in me, or so I thought. He was sending me GP in my e-mail for every newbie review I did over 250 characters. I started e-mailing him back wondering why at first he would even bother paying us newbies for our reviews.

         He told me it was an incentive to get me and the others to start reviewing more. He flat out told me if I want help with my writing, I had to earn it. To improve my writing is to review, review, review, and review some more. He has been right. I decided that the only way I could get my two fully loaded novels of run-on reviewed was to have something the other authors would trade for so I set out to make all the GP I could make reviewing.

         Someone gave me a link to the Art of Criticism, and it had this article on how to review complete with a form all laid out with Writing ML code and I could highlight it and copy it into my review forms. That was awesome I loved those disclaimers they were exactly how I felt about how they should or shouldn’t use my opinions.

         I hope to be able to show you more of these as the newsletter grows. Nothing helps us more than understanding how to brighten up our day then color. Now Blogging color can do different things to a writer. You can use it to highlight your mood and your blog. As a newbie I know I would look at that statement and go “Yea riiiight!”

         So rather than tell you I’m going to show you how to show Writing ML code in text you {{}} double bracket it. When you double bracket the commands Writing ML will hide the first set leaving the actual command. You would only do this to show the commands so someone could copy and paste them and it would actually work now in a different document.

         To make your text the color of your mood you go {c:blue} the really cool part is let's say you like purple. If you start typing in {c: at that point Writing ML will come up and display a color listing you get two choices for purple (grape or violet) so just click on the color you want. It will also put in the {/c}. I cheat and delete the /c and put in a 'b' it saves me time. If neither one is shown, then type in the starting letter of the color {c:g. It will show you grape as well as all colors with g. The last part of this is to stop your color you do {/c} at the place where your text ends or only where you want to stop your color at.

         Now the next part to decorating up your Blog is indentation {indent} is the Writing ML command to use. It is pretty simple to type it once then copy and paste it in the rest of your text. Now comes the fun part. Have you ever tried to read really small text? The fun challenge is trying to read a whole chapter someone uploaded as the fine print that advertisers used to hide all the stuff they didn’t want us to find out.

         Here is the solution {size:5} now as rule of thumb, I use 5 for titles. I use {size:4} for sub titles. For my text, I use {size:3.5}. To stop the size you have to do {/size}. Now I noticed if I use {b} with it. It is even easier to read, and it enhanced my titles. Now just like colors you have to stop it. You use {/b}. This should look like this: {size:5}{c:grape}{b}MyTitle{/b}{/c}{/size}.
{size:3.5}{c:violet}{b}Then for my text in my Blog; I would do it this way and leave it until I finished my text. {/b}{/c}{/size}

         From the example you should notice I start with size, following I do color, next I do bold or b. At the end I go with /b, after that color /c, next /size. The reason I do this is, I think of them as brackets you have to have a set to work. So c:grape ending bracket is /c so the order, I type them in determines the ending order. I close my brackets. Additionally, part of understanding how Writing ML works, is anything that can affect a whole line, or more has to have something to stop it from messing up other parts. It has a start and a stop. The order you type them in matters to the order you stop them in.

If you have questions or need help with Writing ML code please feel to e-mail me The Run-on King PDG Member .

Until next time have fun coloring up your Blogs!
Brett



March 2, 2014 at 12:17pm
March 2, 2014 at 12:17pm
#808701
Dear Editor,

         Have you constantly wondered what has really gone on in the past? Have you perpetually wondered what could be buried deep under the ground you live on? I also used to puzzle over would we truly ever find advanced civilization ruins from our past. Come along with me as I show you what seriously happened those many, many years ago. Meet a new alien race of people named the ‘Fish’ as it translates into English.

         Are you ready for the adventure of a life time? Help us fight an ancient enemy. See the mistakes that created a new frozen lake in the arctic. Watch as we lend a helping hand to rescue an advanced race from genocide. See how easy it is to have disagreements with living computers that can create things out of water as if it was magic.

         Watch as a poor unsuspecting human gets the shock of his life; when he tries to catch his family cat in an ancient tunnel. The tunnel is a life line tied to a power starved, water seeking, living computer. Learn about our past and the ancient race that used to live here. Learn about the enemy that is still actively trying to keep our universe in the dark ages.

         See how peaceful loving gentle races were destroyed with no warning. Meet the Empire or rather what’s left of it as the battle rages on. Watch as he helps to find and rescue a dying planet. Become part of the Empire as he worked hard to save the people who have befriended him.

         This is the book one of nine of my universe “A Tale of Worlds.” I am writing these as my lore for an online MMORPG game. The eight books are the games starting worlds. As in any adventure game, each race has talents and abilities. The ninth book is the one that ties all the eight stories together and begins the game. I am open to spin offs or short stories in this universe. Thank you so very much for allowing me to share my universe with you.

Sincerely yours,
Brett R. Owings

Here is the review on it:

Search the net for advice from agents and editors in regards to how to write a query letter.

Have you constantly wondered what has really gone on in the past?

First rule == Do start with a question. = There are about a hundred reason not to do that, but the main one is that it takes the reader away from subject == even though you asked it to get the reader to be invited to what you have to say. == strange eh? Don't ask me == Just search the net and discover why .

2nd rule = don't exaggerate === no one "constantly" does anything in life.

3rd = rule = refrain from using words that end in ly.

Here you did it again.


Have you perpetually wondered what could be buried deep under the ground you live on.

Make your opening start with an easy to understand theme and then explain how your story is different and unique.


Here is my revamped letter from the review I receive.

Dear Editor,

         I remember how it all started; I got instructed by my beautiful wife to find out how the cat keeps escaping out of the house and fix it. She would disappear down stairs then come crying at the sliding door wanting back in the house. We figured it might have been through the crawlspace, since the kids kept playing with the access panel. It would mean I had a hole in the foundation. I figured that had to be the best place for our “soft, white, and fluffy” to escape from the house.

         I went downstairs into the storage room and opened up the crawlspace covering. Standing over six feet tall and according to my wife larger than an average sized Volkswagen. This makes me a good sized person so crawling under the kitchen is not my idea of fun. Whoever thought up crawlspaces had a mean sense of humor. Let me tell you four feet high will never be enough room to stand. It is not kind to shoulders, and dirt floors are not easy on hands and knees.

         I plugged in a drop light and started to work my way over to the foundation. There I was, hunched and crawling because my cat named Ninja really was a ninja. At least we’d named her correctly. I do a lot of computer repair on the side. We use this unused section of the house to store old cases, and miscellaneous computer parts. I tried to crawl around dodging boxes and cases. After hitting my head a couple of times, and saying a few words my kids shouldn’t hear me say. Crawling around some more I didn’t exactly find a hole.

         I found a section of foundation that the cement was darker in coloration. It looked full of cracks and pieces were flaking off of the foundation. I didn’t expect to find this in the foundation. It wasn’t something a medium sized cat should be able to crawl through, unless she could walk through walls. But it was definitely strange. The flaking had intensified my curiosity. I put out my left hand to brace myself so I could pull off one of the flakes. As my hand hit the colored section of the cement foundation it collapsed, I went head first into a tunnel.

         This is book one of nine of my universe “A Tale of Worlds" it is 108,000 words in size. I am writing these as my lore for an online MMORPG game. The eight books are the games starting worlds. As in any adventure game, each race has talents and abilities. The ninth book is the one that ties all the eight stories together and begins the game. I am open to spin offs or short stories in this universe. The marketing audience for these are the online gamers. Thank you so very much for allowing me to share my universe with you.

Sincerely yours,

Brett R. Owings



Note: For those who don't understand MMORPG it means (Massive Multi-player Online Role Playing Game) equal to World of Warcraft *Copyright* by Blizzard Entertainment.

         I wanted to show you how good reviewing makes a difference. I realize some writers would have been offended by the bluntness of the review. That still doesn't make it a bad review just an honest one. Notice he wasn't mean just direct and to the point. When I googled query letters I was flooded with sales adds up the wazoo. It took a few minutes to sort though them all to find what the gentleman was referring to. http://agentqueryconnect.com/index.php?/topic/8680-query-that-received-two-fulls...

         I really want to thank him for his honesty and bluntness because he really is right. His advice was most helpful and I am very glad he took the time to awaken me out of my stupor. Beside just being a newbie here I had no clue. I'm always up for a challenge it is how we learn. I am very thankful we have this great community where a lot of our pros take time to help get a newbie pointed in the right direction.
February 24, 2014 at 3:10am
February 24, 2014 at 3:10am
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         There once was a writer who wanted to write so good that people would go through the whole gambit of emotions. He wanted to make them shout for joy, cry, run and hide with great fear. Scream, and pull out their hair. He finally got the greatest job in the world. Where his writing does exactly what he wished for. He writes the error code prompts for Microsoft Windows.


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